Quote Originally Posted by Tristann View Post
Haigen sat cross-legged on an ashen beach, watching waves lap at the fractured wood scattered along the shoreline. An untied shoe caught his attention and he started to laugh. His snorts and whoops grew louder, wilder, until the cold pain spreading out from his side stole his breath.
I'm trying to show the character is in shock after an accident, thus the strange behaviour.
I kinda got that and I would have read on without any changes, to find out how the ship got wrecked (I'm guessing), just how injured Haigen is, if anyone else survived, etc. Curiosity tickled.