General reply to frimble3, Mccardy and Rainy Day Boo
I you are interested in reading the whole text, its not really that long, I could post it up here so you can check it out. I am short of the 50 replies required for creating my own post, and I also don’t want to just post it up here and go against the intention of this thread, so if you’re interested, and its ok with the admin here, I can post it up. I would love to hear your feedback to the whole text. Its really not that long.
I do want to mention the following, especially with this text, because it is something that is brought up by people who read it, and I hope that in clearing up this point, maybe it will read differently, or maybe not. I do want to clarify it though.
I feel that the common way of touching a reader’s heart or gut or mind with writing, especially fiction, is through semantics or by narration, the story that is told. Where my voice lies, and how I try to do what all of us try to do, is to do it phonetically rather than through the aforementioned points. I sacrifice semantics to a certain extent, and ease of reading, for phonetics. That’s why those last two lines trip some people up, because my focus is the phonetic flow, not the semantic cohesion.
Sometimes I do it well and sometimes I don’t. But I know that the power of my voice lies there, especially in this type of prose/poetry writing. I do pull back a bit when I write short stories.