Hi,
I'm looking for someone to read part or all of my polished 79,000-word long YA thriller. I'm happy to do an exchange as long as the MS is polished. By polished I mean that it's not a first draft and that it has been edited. (I don't like high fantasy like Harry Potter.) Below is my query (which still needs work, but you will get an idea what it's about):
For as long as she can remember, seventeen-year-old Mel Walker has been obsessed with serial killers. When the NYPD announces a serial killer is loose in the city, hell-bent on killing pretty twelve-year-old girls like Mel’s little sister, Mel is on full alert. Especially since the authorities seem to remain clueless.
When the fifth victim is found near the lab where Mel’s best friend Alyssa volunteers, Mel thinks she’s found a lead. Someone has drawn angry smiley faces—the killer’s leaked signature---on the leaves of an experimental plant created in Alyssa’s lab, and then placed the plant in the lobby for everyone to see.. The killer must be someone working there who did this to taunt the stumped authorities. But before Mel and Alyssa can bring the plant to the police, it’s destroyed.
Since the police don’t take Mel and Alyssa seriously without the plant, the girls investigate the lead on their own. As a sixth victim is found near the lab, Mel is even surer they’re on to something. Unfortunately, she’s also surer Alyssa, who’s acting weirder by the day, might have something to do with the murders
P.S. I'm a very quick beta and would like to work with someone who is also quick.
Thanks for reading my post.
I'm looking for someone to read part or all of my polished 79,000-word long YA thriller. I'm happy to do an exchange as long as the MS is polished. By polished I mean that it's not a first draft and that it has been edited. (I don't like high fantasy like Harry Potter.) Below is my query (which still needs work, but you will get an idea what it's about):
For as long as she can remember, seventeen-year-old Mel Walker has been obsessed with serial killers. When the NYPD announces a serial killer is loose in the city, hell-bent on killing pretty twelve-year-old girls like Mel’s little sister, Mel is on full alert. Especially since the authorities seem to remain clueless.
When the fifth victim is found near the lab where Mel’s best friend Alyssa volunteers, Mel thinks she’s found a lead. Someone has drawn angry smiley faces—the killer’s leaked signature---on the leaves of an experimental plant created in Alyssa’s lab, and then placed the plant in the lobby for everyone to see.. The killer must be someone working there who did this to taunt the stumped authorities. But before Mel and Alyssa can bring the plant to the police, it’s destroyed.
Since the police don’t take Mel and Alyssa seriously without the plant, the girls investigate the lead on their own. As a sixth victim is found near the lab, Mel is even surer they’re on to something. Unfortunately, she’s also surer Alyssa, who’s acting weirder by the day, might have something to do with the murders
P.S. I'm a very quick beta and would like to work with someone who is also quick.
Thanks for reading my post.
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