Radical Terza-Rima-Renga-O-Rama!!

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If you’re reading this thread, it’s probably because the title made you go ‘hmmm’. So let’s break it down:

Radical
Adjective: (esp. of change or action) Relating to or affecting the fundamental nature of something; far-reaching or thorough.
Noun: A person who advocates thorough or complete political or social reform.
adjective. fundamental - drastic

Terza Rima is an open verse form constructed from an indefinite number of three-line stanzas that makes use of interlocking rhyme thus: aba bcb cdc ded and so on. There is no pre-defined line measure or metre, but most English poets will use iambic/trochaic pentameter or hexameter.

Renga is one genre of Japanese collaborative poetry, otherwise referred to as linked poetry or shared poetry. It will generally consists of at least two ‘ku’ (or stanzas) but can range up to many, many more. The first stanza of the traditional renga is known as the hokku and is what evolved into the modern haiku.

The term ‘O-Rama’ usually implies a greater-than-usual number, volume, or variety of a specified thing and may also be used to form commercial names and other words for events and displays and spectacles.

This is what I’m proposing:

  • a renga where the stanza form of choice is terza rima (including the interlocking rhyme scheme);
  • each post is done by a different (or returning) poet;
  • the first and third line of each new post rhyme with the second line of the previous post;
  • no requirement to follow theme (optional with extra shiny bonus rep-points if you do);
  • no set line measure, so go 5-7-5 or pentametric, or simply write lines of 6, or 8, or however many syllables whether uniform or not—the importance is on us making Terza Rima into Renga.

Okay, so it’s not quite radical, and if no one gets involved, it won’t exactly be an ‘o-rama’ either, but let’s at least see where it goes :D

As is customary, I’ll go first to illustrate:

It dawned on me, not long after the setting sun,
risen with the moon against the livid skyline:
'Terza Rima Renga'—purest inspiration!


Next Post has lines 1 and 3 rhyme with 'skyline' and a new rhyme for line 2. You go...
 
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Do we use one of your lines in the next post?
 

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Do we use one of your lines in the next post?

No, you just have to make your first and third line rhyme with my second line,

It dawned on me, not long after the setting sun,
risen with the moon against the livid skyline:
'Terza Rima Renga'—purest inspiration!

and introduce a new rhyme for your second line. The poster after you rhymes their first and third line with your second line and introduces a new rhyme for their second and so on.

My post is aba
Your post is bcb
After you the post is cdc
etc etc etc...
 

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