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As I read through the threads asking what my favorite line would be, or the first line of a WIP, I realized that many of my favorite lines are the ones I end up cutting.
I know during revision there is always that point where you find a line that you love, but it doesn't work for one reason or another. Why not give those poor forsaken lines one last chance to stand in the spotlight?
Mine comes form my current WIP. The protaganist is a man cursed with immortality. Each time he dies he awakens the next day to find that he has lost another memory from his past.
I loved this line, but it always came off to me as being over written. Plus it made me feel like I was trying too hard to be witty when I came acrossed it during revisions:
"My memories have become as faint as mist, and I fear the few I have left will fade away when I next see the morning sun."
I know during revision there is always that point where you find a line that you love, but it doesn't work for one reason or another. Why not give those poor forsaken lines one last chance to stand in the spotlight?
Mine comes form my current WIP. The protaganist is a man cursed with immortality. Each time he dies he awakens the next day to find that he has lost another memory from his past.
I loved this line, but it always came off to me as being over written. Plus it made me feel like I was trying too hard to be witty when I came acrossed it during revisions:
"My memories have become as faint as mist, and I fear the few I have left will fade away when I next see the morning sun."
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