I got burned (rightly so) in query hell and I'm having difficulties with the rewrite.
The major story sections focus on:
1) Telepathich MC getting an internship on an FTL development project and learning the his birth father (source of telepathy) was a descendant of colonists thought lost centuries before. Some returned to Earth to save
2) MC falls for another hybrid character (forbidden love)on the R&D station.
3) MC lLearns of a pending attack on Earth and that new girlfriend and other hybrids are leaving to try and stop (or slow) the enemy.
4) MC volunteering to help in the battle. (He's placed on a team with other hybrids, but girlfriend isn't one of them).
So, using the "3 Questions" frequently brought up:
1) What does MC want? Initially just wants the internship, but later want so protect Earth and girlfriend. That's the easy answer. The deep philosophical answer is he wants to fit somewhere. He's telepathic (partially) and not very trusting of others since he sees the duality and dishonesty of those around him. (Long story there)
2) What does he have to do to get it? He thinks that he'll get what he wants on the FTL internship, but when girlfriend is basically drafted, he goes alone, hoping to protect her and Earth. (FYI, he has a lost love issue earlier in the story and doesn't want to make that mistake again).
3) What happens if he fails? His girlfriend could die and two civilizations could ultimately fall.
Comments? Opinions? Funny expressions?
Thanks.
The major story sections focus on:
1) Telepathich MC getting an internship on an FTL development project and learning the his birth father (source of telepathy) was a descendant of colonists thought lost centuries before. Some returned to Earth to save
2) MC falls for another hybrid character (forbidden love)on the R&D station.
3) MC lLearns of a pending attack on Earth and that new girlfriend and other hybrids are leaving to try and stop (or slow) the enemy.
4) MC volunteering to help in the battle. (He's placed on a team with other hybrids, but girlfriend isn't one of them).
So, using the "3 Questions" frequently brought up:
1) What does MC want? Initially just wants the internship, but later want so protect Earth and girlfriend. That's the easy answer. The deep philosophical answer is he wants to fit somewhere. He's telepathic (partially) and not very trusting of others since he sees the duality and dishonesty of those around him. (Long story there)
2) What does he have to do to get it? He thinks that he'll get what he wants on the FTL internship, but when girlfriend is basically drafted, he goes alone, hoping to protect her and Earth. (FYI, he has a lost love issue earlier in the story and doesn't want to make that mistake again).
3) What happens if he fails? His girlfriend could die and two civilizations could ultimately fall.
Comments? Opinions? Funny expressions?
Thanks.