This is just a rant really, and the beta is somebody I know - not a real beta
To my lovely, lovely beta. And I mean that. You help me immensely, and I adore you. But if you just barely skimmed the thing and are low on time, please just say that you didn't have time to read it like you would if it were a real book.
If I leave out the lapdance and customers part, how are folks gonna know she's a stripper? You know she's a stripper. Oh, you didn't catch that she was a stripper? Ah.
If you don't have a clue what happened in the 3rd paragraph, how do you know it needs an 'although'?
Yes, maybe she could meet his gaze instead of averting her eyes, but it sounded like a good place to mention why she's shy. Oh, you didn't catch that she's shy? The word 'shy' was supposed to help.
I have just written a draft with your changes, and it reads a lot like See Dick Run. Saying George 3 times in 2 sentences seems a bit much, but if you really think it's not clear without it...
Wait. Maybe you should read it again when you have more time. No, I know you read it carefully. Good night, and thanks
And with that, I'm gonna shake out my brain and close yWrite for a bit. Just sayin'.
To my lovely, lovely beta. And I mean that. You help me immensely, and I adore you. But if you just barely skimmed the thing and are low on time, please just say that you didn't have time to read it like you would if it were a real book.
If I leave out the lapdance and customers part, how are folks gonna know she's a stripper? You know she's a stripper. Oh, you didn't catch that she was a stripper? Ah.
If you don't have a clue what happened in the 3rd paragraph, how do you know it needs an 'although'?
Yes, maybe she could meet his gaze instead of averting her eyes, but it sounded like a good place to mention why she's shy. Oh, you didn't catch that she's shy? The word 'shy' was supposed to help.
I have just written a draft with your changes, and it reads a lot like See Dick Run. Saying George 3 times in 2 sentences seems a bit much, but if you really think it's not clear without it...
Wait. Maybe you should read it again when you have more time. No, I know you read it carefully. Good night, and thanks
And with that, I'm gonna shake out my brain and close yWrite for a bit. Just sayin'.