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Hi, sorry if this is in the wrong place but there's nothing in SYW that suits. I'm starting a new genre made up out of my own head called "Chaste Erotica". Maybe MacCannister could add a new page to teh SYW forum, unless she's a looser.
Anyway please crit. Here is chapter one from my novel, "Bite Me". I have spended months on this; do your worst:
Once upon a time I went to live with someone far away and he was like, totes unimportant but I needed an excuse to go somewhere it rained a lot. My hair went frizzy but it smelled of strawberries.
I went to school and like, everyone there asked me out even though I'm like, not pretty. Anyway the boys there were oogy except for this one guy who was like, really pale and stuff? And his brothers and sisters were really pretty but not as pretty as him.
Anyway one night he broke into my house and we made out. Then some guy hit on me and my new boyfriend totes tore his ass up and I was like, "My hero."
The End.
Anyway please crit. Here is chapter one from my novel, "Bite Me". I have spended months on this; do your worst:
Once upon a time I went to live with someone far away and he was like, totes unimportant but I needed an excuse to go somewhere it rained a lot. My hair went frizzy but it smelled of strawberries.
I went to school and like, everyone there asked me out even though I'm like, not pretty. Anyway the boys there were oogy except for this one guy who was like, really pale and stuff? And his brothers and sisters were really pretty but not as pretty as him.
Anyway one night he broke into my house and we made out. Then some guy hit on me and my new boyfriend totes tore his ass up and I was like, "My hero."
The End.