WHEREVER YOU WANT TO: think up-tempo; electric guitars, some muted drums, an itty bitty bit of a sort of techno sound to it, a sort of static background so it sounds a little tattered, torn and edgy and a little violin for some sort of different funk...probably a bit of crisp piano as well.
If I slid into your room
Would you let me get to you?
Would you let me see your soul through
All the slivers that you hide
Of the fears you keep inside
If I told you that I want you?
'Cause I know that
You know that
I want you;
And if you breathe in,
I'll breathe out
The whole night through.
'Cause I'd sell my soul to you,
And I'd walk on glass for you.
I'll press my skin on you.
I'm telling you take me
Wherever you want to!
If I said it was alright,
Would you keep me in your sight?
Or would you run away when
All my doubts are stripped aside
And if I told you that I lied
When I said I didn't want to?
'Cause I want now
More than then
What I shouldn't do
And if you let me
I'll let you... (giggle)
'Cause I'd sell my soul to you
And I'd walk on glass for you.
I'd press my lips on you.
I'm begging you take me
Wherever you want to!
Alright, so I don't really "write" music because I have no idea how to write a note or what I'm singing, nor do I play any instruments, except by ear. So, I write lyrics and I sing tunes and melodies that happen to come in with them. This particular one just came as a song one night. Generally I write a poem and a year or two later I read them, a melody pops into mind, and then I edit and record vocally.
I have a problem creating a bridge for this song and many others in particular, and finding a propper way to "end" the song. If you could all let me know your thoughts on the lyrics or how to create a bridge appropriate for the song, it would be great!
I don't see an option for adding a recorded attachment, BUT, here's what I "hear" for this song: It's kind of rock-ish. It's got electric guitars, some muted drums, an itty bitty bit of a sort of techno sound to it, a sort of static background so it sounds a little tattered, torn and edgy and a little violin for some sort of different funk...probably a bit of piano as well.
I could try to re-record the vocals I came up with so that they sound half-way decent and post a link from yousendit.com or something, but perhaps you all can do with what I've given ya' so far.
Thanks a bunch in advance for your input! I'm craving critique!!!!!
If I slid into your room
Would you let me get to you?
Would you let me see your soul through
All the slivers that you hide
Of the fears you keep inside
If I told you that I want you?
'Cause I know that
You know that
I want you;
And if you breathe in,
I'll breathe out
The whole night through.
'Cause I'd sell my soul to you,
And I'd walk on glass for you.
I'll press my skin on you.
I'm telling you take me
Wherever you want to!
If I said it was alright,
Would you keep me in your sight?
Or would you run away when
All my doubts are stripped aside
And if I told you that I lied
When I said I didn't want to?
'Cause I want now
More than then
What I shouldn't do
And if you let me
I'll let you... (giggle)
'Cause I'd sell my soul to you
And I'd walk on glass for you.
I'd press my lips on you.
I'm begging you take me
Wherever you want to!
Alright, so I don't really "write" music because I have no idea how to write a note or what I'm singing, nor do I play any instruments, except by ear. So, I write lyrics and I sing tunes and melodies that happen to come in with them. This particular one just came as a song one night. Generally I write a poem and a year or two later I read them, a melody pops into mind, and then I edit and record vocally.
I have a problem creating a bridge for this song and many others in particular, and finding a propper way to "end" the song. If you could all let me know your thoughts on the lyrics or how to create a bridge appropriate for the song, it would be great!
I don't see an option for adding a recorded attachment, BUT, here's what I "hear" for this song: It's kind of rock-ish. It's got electric guitars, some muted drums, an itty bitty bit of a sort of techno sound to it, a sort of static background so it sounds a little tattered, torn and edgy and a little violin for some sort of different funk...probably a bit of piano as well.
I could try to re-record the vocals I came up with so that they sound half-way decent and post a link from yousendit.com or something, but perhaps you all can do with what I've given ya' so far.
Thanks a bunch in advance for your input! I'm craving critique!!!!!
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