Yesterday's Last Line

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This is the line that preceded the last line from yesterday...

He had taken only three steps into the apartment before he stumbled backwards towards the hall saying, “Oh, Lord, Jesus, no! Ms. Luzon, no!”
 

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“That puts him on the scene,” Yolanda snapped, pulling her phone from her pocket. She walked away from him speaking into her phone, “Chief…”
 

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“Okay, if you say so. I hope you have a good day. Even though I think you’re going to regret this. I’ll see you in two weeks.” He conceded his voice. Perhaps I was taking the wrong step to refuse his offer.
 

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“Mornin’, mon Chéri. You want to move your hand off my ***?”

“Why would I do that?”
 

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“Why couldn’t you have gone with that?” he asked.
 

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"Good, you're pregnant. When's your due date? I'll be back," the Sperminator said.
 

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“How long?”

Long time was the look that Milton gave.

“Oy vey, and his daughter too. Would she testify for you?”

“Of course,” he said aloud, “but I won’t ask her to.”
 

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A brief reminder, not aimed at anyone in particular: We seek the last line. One sentence. Yes, what came before provides context, but who needs context?

My last line, during a day I wrote almost nothing:

We click glasses gently; this is the third or fourth set of crystal stemware he’s bought us after cracking or shattering the delicate wine glasses in toasts.
 

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@Maryn , I feel appropriately chastised.

Yolanda smiled. “I can’t wait.”
 

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There you go! (And isn't chastisement fun, in the right hands?)

He remains unaware that occasionally I’ll see someone I know, a former client, although rarely in a big role.
 

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All I've been writing is emails :( and I'm pretty sure no one wants to read an Omicron business emergency plan or an assessment of my mother's declining cognitive skills.
 

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Tears were streaming before the elevator doors opened.
 

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All I've been writing is emails :( and I'm pretty sure no one wants to read an Omicron business emergency plan or an assessment of my mother's declining cognitive skills.
Oh, man, I've been there, the cognitive skills part, only it was Mr. Maryn's mother, who'd moved to our city to be close to family. It fell on me to deal with most of it. There's a huge thread here at AW where people facing similar issues share what they've learned and support one another.

Also, my PM box is open, any time.

Maryn, with an KN95 hug
 
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Now he takes off the little bistro apron and stands ***** except for the leather collar.
 

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Now he takes off the little bistro apron and stands ***** except for the leather collar.
What does it say about me that I can't guess what the deleted word is? I thought naked but can't see why that would need to be blocked out.
 

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It's a double entendre. (Did I spell that right?) Rhymes with eject.
 

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I thought maybe that, but does it need to be starred out?

Though now I'm wondering where the leather collar is located.....
 

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It's just an ordinary dog collar, sized for a nice big man.

I tend to be pretty conservative about what I star out. I seem to be set on overprotective mom permanently. To hear them tell it, I ruined our children's young lives not letting them see or do what their peers sometimes did.

So here's another sentence from yesterday:

“Cheryl, there’s no reason for you to buy cheap-*** shit."
 
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Charon logged on hoping her friends were there.
 

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Bring me a loaf of bread.

(feel compelled to say, considering the forum, just to eat in a normal fashion.)
 
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A woman with lumpy features and scraggling hair sat astride a stallion as splendidly beautiful as she was ugly. Only her wings, white and crested as her horse’s mane, lent her a bit of borrowed magnificence.

(Yes. I wrote words. Nearly one hundred of them. Words that are intended to eventually be a story. An erotica story. With valkyries. We shall see if it eventuates.)
 
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"Only my phone and contracts."
 

Elizabeth George's book Write Away