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Baxter shuddered, but followed Lillium down a passage that would hopefully lead to the cave’s exit.

---------------------Vampire Loves Sunling
 

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Hmmm, yesterday was an editing day for me, on one of the non-s** chapters but she does have a strange wet dream in it and the last line on the chapter was "Well, what the f*** was that?"
 

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Hey, new arrivals, first off, welcome. Second, we play a silly game in which we substitute the letters of ordinary words for those asterisked out because they're not suitable for all AW members. So f*** has to start with f and be four letters long.

This one's impossible for me to turn into something else, but I'm not really good at this. (Coddiwomple, who I haven't seen in a while, is a master at it.)

"Well, what the frog was that?" Meh.

My last line yesterday: “Charlie always took care of it.” Abruptly, I missed him. I hadn’t appreciated the things he did for us, just resented what he didn’t, like remain faithful.
 

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It's fine. You didn't post anything weird, and unless you read way far back, you probably didn't see anything weird, either.

There's a Share the Last Line You Wrote thread in Novels. I bet that's what you were aiming for.

Still, nice to see you here!

Maryn, who feels welcome at threads where you're a major presence
 

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(Ilyrlen, any luck getting access?)

My last line yesterday:

That night, checking my email using the house’s internet signal on the darkened patio, I heard an irregular creaking noise that became regular before Petra’s “Yes, yes, oh God…” The sound sped up and held the faster pace. Their bedroom window was open, and I left as quietly as I could.
 
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Wyatt breaks two eggs into the melted butter before he replies. “That’s why I can have a biscuit on the side. Store-bought, okay but nothin’ special. Smother it with peach jam and I might even finish it.”
 

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She told me she was throwing me out and I said she couldn’t, because I was leaving. "Best decision I ever made." It was such a fine decision I spent the night in my car, shivering, and called in at work so I could bring her roses I couldn’t afford.
 

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The light sears my eyeballs and I wince, then blink, attempting to open them beyond slits. It feels like I’ve got no tears, that scratchy.
I don’t like what I see.
 

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And she’s back. Key in lock, front door, footsteps, bedroom door, a shocked, “Oh!”

I'm ****ed.
 

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(I'm going to keep playing in this thread all alone...)

“When you drink with your friends, I don’t expect anything from you, not even a safe ride home. But you still manage to disappoint me.”
 

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He’s a sweet man, trying so hard to be what I want, whether he wants it or not, while also being what I need, whether I want it or not.
 

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“I don’t think we can work as a couple unless I can do what I need to do. That involves you not just tolerating it but getting fully on board, in complete agreement that it’s what should happen.”

"Holy ****, babe."
 

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I stop where I’m standing but don’t turn around. “What did I do wrong this time?” Did I **** up for real?
 

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“What do they call this place?” Didi asked as they rode into town.

Mr. Lee looked at her and shrugged. “The gate camp,” he said. “They don’t call it nothing else, just the gate camp.”

“There’s only one?” she asked.

“No,” Bobby intervened. “There are others, but things are so spread out we think of everything here as South Port..."
 

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“You said, Nice titties. To my boss!” The swats rain down, hard and steady. The time for talking is through. This is the time to squirm and flinch, to have my leg fall from her lap, to gasp and moan, to escalate to a single half-swallowed yelp and finally to, “Stop, please stop, you have to stop!”

But I don't say my real stop word, so she doesn’t.
 

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"I am surprised he survived", he says. His beard muffles his deep voice, and he steps closer to me. "Colour me impressed."
 

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Even for me and my sweet tooth, it’s a bit much, but I eat my half of the regular waffle and half my half of the chocolate. “You want this?” I offer.
 

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“It was dirty.” She shrugged, turning around to walk away. “Want some breakfast?”
 

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"It's a bunch of stuff we got sent accidentally," Renee said hastily. "We don't use it."

"So you're just accidentally having sex with a dog toy?"
 

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Beside him, where his freed fingers thrummed, a small, round table, scarified and off kilter.
 

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It takes only a few days to see I made a grave mistake to insist Andrew take his time on my house. Saving his knees is costing my mind.
 

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