Yesterday's Last Line

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Maryn

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Hey, erotica writers, prove you’re on the job. Copy and paste the last line you wrote yesterday. We don’t need to know who these characters are or what the hell’s going on. This thread can be context-free, just showing one another we’re writing.

Since this is a public board open to young members, please use asterisks or other symbols as you deem it appropriate, whether it’s for a particular word or two, or for an explicit or graphic phrase or act.

I'll go first. My last line yesterday was:

“Of course not. The video cameras hidden all over the house will capture it well enough.”
 

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Sorry I didn't participate more in the other thread. I still write slow, so I mainly concentrated on my book instead of writing extra things, but this I can do. Here's my last line from yesterday. If I ever go to far for the open forum let me know and I'll be happy to edit what I post.

Feeling her first breast sucked dry, laying down pulling Lauren with her, Freyja spreads her legs as she gently pushes Lauren’s head lower while softly telling her, “Now make me ***, and become one with us.”
 
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I cranked out some wordage yesterday despite a headache. Last line edited for those of tender ages.

“Domina,” he echoes. “Whatever you say. I can’t [deleted] yet, but I can [deleted]."
 

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Hmm...more lines from M. "Whose line is it, anyway?" I miss that improv comedy show. To contribute:

"Story is, the Congresswoman found some masculist tracts among his snail mail and she figured that's why he was starting to question her authority at home."
 

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Hey, nice to see you again, Trevor. Who'd a thunk two of the three participants were doing FemDom, eh?
 

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Yesterday's last line:

My phone makes its message sound. I open the text from A. Sol, which is smart. It says: Better Man My Ass.

For the record, I am not happy with its message sound, but I'll come back to that later.
 

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The last thing I wrote was in my notes for the story.

Change Nena to Nina
Change Vine Freya to another name
Make the first few translocations more descriptive.
 

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Mine was nice and clean for once:

How does he think I carried in the groceries he’s been eating all month if tonight I’m capable only of the bag with the toilet paper and fresh mushrooms?
 

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He takes the hand that held the paddle minutes before, kisses the back like the ring of a god on earth, and holds it to his chest, his heart slowing against my palm until I realize he’s asleep.
 

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"But we are changing history, just with me being here and Karina helping you tonight, so maybe wait till she tries to claw off her ****, then tie her between the trees.”
 

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“Well, she’s probably secretly pleased you said vigorously. A woman wants her son to be a good lover.”
 

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Wiping her tears once more, she kisses Arianna on her forehead before gently picking her up and her four friends escort them out to the courtyard.
 

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Returning Mindy’s embrace Vinda tells her, “It’s a shame you and Freyja can’t help turn her, but both of you can join in the fun while we wait for her to wake up.”
 

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Hm, what's the last thing I was working on yesterday? It wasn't a great writing day, too much else going on. (But hey, everybody's got clean socks and underwear again!)

“Great. I should talk to Wyatt about how he thinks I ought to handle this.”
“So we’ll see you in a half hour?”


Every novel includes the mundane, I guess.
 

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Smiling with joy knowing that her lover will be okay, Mindy sees Arianna wake up, intently watching her eye’s bulge open and she inhales a shuddering breath while clutching on to her ***** and cussing in old Nordic.
 

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"This has been a life-changing month and I’m grateful to have had it. Thank you, Cheri. Cheryl. Now I’m hitting the weights before you start ****."


“That’s later.”
 

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“He did the pomegranate,” Cheryl announces.
 

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Awkward, but it's the last thing I wrote.

Seeing the glowing radiating from her skin gather around her ******* flowing towards her *******, forcing Arianna to jerk and spasm as her final orgasm roars through her body as the glowing dissipates leaving the thin faint intricately woven tattoos around each of her *******.
 

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The need for so many asterisks made me chuckle, Jake.
 

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I'm glad it made you laugh, lol. I found one more scene that needed finished, I don't know how I forgot about it, it's where Arianna is transformed into a sex goddess. Then the ending where the four mortal women that have been introduced through out the story get turned into sex goddesses. So lots of sex, I'm not really sure how far to go in the open forum, so I figured better safe than sorry.
 
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I appreciate that. Clearly some people posting to this board over the years have either forgotten it's open to kids or don't care if such a post has the potential to get the site owner in trouble.

My last line from yesterday stopped mid-sentence, so I'll post the last completed sentence:

I delete the rest, pulling up my pants one-handed.
 

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Does after midnight count as yesterday? lol.

Suddenly feeling light headed Mindy holds onto Freyja for support and tells her, “A bunch of new memories just formed in my head. I can now remember feeling my sister’s sexual energy, and some of the conversations I had with Arianna have changed.”

Sorry Maryn, no asterisks this time, lol.
 
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You could asterisk out perfectly innocent words and keep me guessing for hours, you know...
 

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I sure wish more people were playing along, but I can also amuse myself with the imaginary book that Jake and I could create with alternating chapters. All we have to do is figure out a way to tie the stories at the end, right?

Yesteray's final line:

“You’re not the only one, bro.” He walks to the pool deck and jumps in with a splash, but not before I get a look at his ass, pink as a sunburn.