The Quantum Eraser Gamble - 477 words

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Hi friends. Is this story some kind of trope violation? Feel free to be brutal - and no need to waste time on a super-thorough analysis - just a general impression. I don't have much vested in this one. Many thanks! KS


The Quantum Eraser Gamble

Darkness gave way to consciousness, confusion and, fear. My arms and legs were strapped to a leather chair. I sat across the table from a media judge in a studio confession chamber, robotic cameras peering at me through the darkness.

"We're live again in twenty seconds," the judge stated.

"What?" I asked behind pounding heartbeats.

A wall-sized display panel behind the judge showed the video frame of an elderly man sitting on park bench. Somehow I knew him, but his identity escaped me.

"Three, two, one, and ... we're back with Ultranet marketing mogul and murder suspect Paul Freeman..."

"What?!" Suspects were guilty, murderers as good as dead. "Hold on ..." I tried to protest.

A hubbub of laughs and whispers arose from behind me. "He doesn't remember..." I heard someone say.
"Order!" the judge demanded, placing a heavy black revolver on the table.

My shocked mind failed to formulate words.

"You've all seen the gruesome photos of the incident," the judge resumed the broadcast. "The dismemberment, the maniacal blood lust. A guilty verdict is inevitable. It's time for you - the Ultranet jury - to render an official verdict with this irrefutable evidence: an exclusive video filmed by the sadistic murderer himself."

The display screen showed a live close-up of my wide-eyed, bewildered face, and then minimized to a top-right PiP frame, old man on park bench front and center. I struggled to breathe, thoughts scattered. A name came to me: Decker.

"The victim was none other than esteemed quantum physicist, Alan Decker," the judge continued.

Even in my terrified state, I marveled at the magnitude of this spectacle - two famous people, a hideous crime, and solid evidence. No doubt my execution would score billions of hits and set the Ultranet on fire.

"Again, this kind of extreme violence should only be viewed by tax-paying consumers," the judge declared with false sobriety. "Without further delay, behold the video evidence, and let the polling begin!"

A sidebar of popular insta-news agencies scrolled down the left side of the display, each with its own innocent-guilty, live-feed pivot bar. I tried to steady my facial expression. It would be my only defense.

The video began with the professor eating lunch on a beautiful day in a park. A bead of sweat rolled down my face in real time. The cameras caught it and guilt meters pegged red for all agencies.

"Here comes the murderer," the judge narrated the video. "This is hard to watch." But no one appeared on the scene, and Professor Decker continued eating his sandwich. It became evident that something wasn't right. The judge signaled his staff.

The frame slow-zoomed to the professor. He dabbed his mouth with a handkerchief and smiled. "Hello world," he began. "You are witnessing the successful outcome of a most remarkable experiment. Obviously I am alive in this universe. Thank you for your distribution expertise, Paul. You are free to go."
 

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Hi KamakuraSurfer!

I'm guessing this is hinting towards a Schrodinger's cat type affair, where the victim was killed in one universe and Paul has somehow managed to film another universe? I don't think all of that is entirely clear and so you might need to be a bit more explicit (especially for readers who aren't so used to sci-fi tropes :D)
 

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I liked the plot of ultranet jury. Some parts confused me.

Hi friends. Is this story some kind of trope violation? Feel free to be brutal - and no need to waste time on a super-thorough analysis - just a general impression. I don't have much vested in this one. Many thanks! KS


The Quantum Eraser Gamble

Darkness gave way to consciousness, confusion and,(maybe this comma should be before 'and') fear. My arms and legs were strapped to a leather chair. I sat across the table from a media judge in a studio confession chamber, robotic cameras peering at me through the darkness.

"We're live again in twenty seconds," the judge stated.

"What?" I asked behind pounding heartbeats.

A wall-sized display panel behind the judge showed the video frame of an elderly man sitting on park bench. Somehow I knew him, but his identity escaped me.

"Three, two, one, and ... we're back with Ultranet marketing mogul and murder suspect Paul Freeman..."

"What?!" Suspects were guilty, murderers as good as dead(i'm not sure this is what he would think at this point. he'd still be confused as to what's going on). "Hold on ..." I tried to protest.

A hubbub of laughs and whispers arose from behind me. "He doesn't remember..." I heard someone say.
"Order!" the judge demanded, placing a heavy black revolver(maybe replace revolver with gavel) on the table.

My shocked mind failed to formulate words.

"You've all seen the gruesome photos of the incident," the judge resumed the broadcast. "The dismemberment, the maniacal blood lust. A guilty verdict is inevitable. It's time for you - the Ultranet jury - to render an official verdict with this irrefutable evidence: an exclusive video filmed by the sadistic murderer himself."(why would he film a video of the murder? and how did the judge get this?)

The display screen showed a live close-up of my wide-eyed, bewildered face, and then minimized to a top-right PiP frame, old man on park bench front and center(i didn't understand PiP frame and front and center part). I struggled to breathe, thoughts scattered. A name came to me: Decker.

"The victim was none other than esteemed quantum physicist, Alan Decker," the judge continued.

Even in my terrified state, I marveled at the magnitude of this spectacle - two famous people, a hideous crime, and solid evidence. No doubt my execution would score billions of hits and set the Ultranet on fire.

"Again, this kind of extreme violence should only be viewed by tax-paying consumers(why would the judge say this?)," the judge declared with false sobriety. "Without further delay, behold the video evidence, and let the polling begin!"

A sidebar of popular insta-news agencies(how many names of agencies can come in the left side of tv screen? maybe a sidebar of 3 popular insta-news agencies) scrolled down the left side of the display, each with its own innocent-guilty, live-feed pivot bar. I tried to steady my facial expression. It would be my only defense.

The video began with the professor eating lunch on a beautiful day in a park. A bead of sweat rolled down my face in real time. The cameras caught it and guilt meters pegged red for all agencies(i liked this).

"Here comes the murderer," the judge narrated (maybe add: in or at) the video. "This is hard to watch." But no one appeared on the scene, and Professor Decker continued eating his sandwich. It became evident that something wasn't right. The judge signaled his staff.

The frame slow-zoomed to the professor. He dabbed his mouth with a handkerchief and smiled. "Hello world," he began. "You are witnessing the successful outcome of a most remarkable experiment. Obviously I am alive in this universe(not sure what this means). Thank you for your distribution expertise, Paul. You are free to go."

I didn't understand the ending. But it was an easy read and interesting concept.
 

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Thank you very much for the comments!

@Jaus, thanks for the critique. I made some change as per your suggestions.

@Lead, hey, yeah I don't know what kind of sci-fi trope I was going for with this one. This story came from a dream (I was both accused and victim). The story made no sense but I wrote it down anyway. Spent less than an hour on it total, and it seemed "OK". My wife and a friend really liked it, so I thought maybe it was worth polishing up. I tried researching what quantum phenom might tie this together, but concluded it was a bit heavy of a topic to explain in such a short story. Let me know if you have any ideas. Thanks. KS