- Jul 12, 2019
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I think you need a stronger opening sequence than “the room was small” but I really liked the second half of the first sentence. It immediately tells so much about the character but then the second sentence more or less says the same thing with “dumped” and with “her hands bound behind her back”. With the small window you have in the opening sentence I think each sentence should build into the other so that the second sentence adds something more. Perhaps you can create some tension as you did in the last sentence and then use your third sentence as a twist to create some suspense. Just an idea thanks for sharing!The opening to a Regency fantasy romance I'm working on:
The room was small, and the floorboards that Sophia Turnbull’s face were pressed against reeked of old ale and smoke. She’d been dumped in the center of the floor, away from whatever resources for escape the room offered, her hands bound behind her back. Bloody hostler was on the take.