I'm just going to leave this story in here.

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Alfredoxrock

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Sand Castle

Ages ago, far on a place that's not on maps.
Lived a young prince whose name was forbidden
and trapped in a sand castle he remained in solitude.
Dreams he had about all places in the world;
but deep down he knew, real could they never become.
so, he waited for the waves of time to come by
and free him from all that sand.​
 

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Hi Alfred!
This is really good and fun.
I'd almost call it a poem maybe? That's just semantics though, I like it regardless :)

I think you could possible clean it up just a bit.

'Ages ago, far on a place that's not on maps,' for example isn't the easiest to read.

Maybe something like: 'Eons ago, in a place for which no map has ever been drawn,' might give the same meaning but read a bit smoother.

Thanks for sharing your work!
 

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