The 'you' isn't supposed to be 'you' the reader. The 'you' MC is a young man who's working a night shift behind the hotel bar, and an unpleasant, creepy regular customer comes in, and he has to deal with him. I'm using second person to try to achieve a sleepy, trapped feeling. I want to make the reader feel like they're stuck there with the bartender. It's kind of claustrophobic.
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But seriously, it sounds great for the type and length of story you're writing, and I am iffy on second person as a rule.