Here’s another one.
Tomazz Wheelson took his seat before the Tribunal. Its members looked down on him from a raised wooden bench. Muted talk and coughing echoed through the hall.
I agree with the consensus and would specifially encourage more emotive words. EX: 'c
oughing' is neutral, pure setting no more, but '
nervous coughing' would convey a sense of trepidation among the onlookers. '
Hacking coughing' might convey a threat of disease, not sure, but you have room to add color to some of these words.
Similarly, a raised wooden bench is fairly neutral, and other choices might be more intriguing. A
battered wooden bench might make me curious. A
stately wooden bench, being somewhat predictable for a typical fictional tribunal, probably would not. I'd also brainstorm ways to share Tomazz's drive, motivation, inner state of being.
Through force of will, Tomazz Wheelson gave no outward sign of rage as he took his seat before the tribunal.
Basically, you have some room to breathe emotion in. This may not be your style, which is also fine and good. Trust your instincts! Plenty of writers are sparse along this axis.
Not sure Tribunal should be capitalized.