Chain, chain, chain, chain of haiku fools

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A haiku game...

The last line of the previous person's haiku becomes the first line of the next person's haiku.​

For purposes of this game, my definition of haiku is simply a 5-7-5 syllable format.​

I'll start with a haiku inspired by the lyrics of Aretha Franklin's Chain Of Fools.​


You treated me mean,
now I'm where you wanted me--
a link in your chain

The first line of the next haiku becomes​

A link in your chain
 

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ddgryphon said:
Fair weather passing
Over this glorious day
Ah, earthly heaven

Oops! Sorry ddgrphon; perhaps it will take a few more links to illustrate the chained formation.

The first line of the next haiku in the sequence needs to be the last line of the last haiku posted. . .

crown of lovers fair
 

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Crown of lovers fair
wafted scent of purfume lasts
lingers on the air.
 

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rings and echoes in my brain
your voice calls my name
 

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JAlpha said:
Oops! Sorry ddgrphon; perhaps it will take a few more links to illustrate the chained formation.

The first line of the next haiku in the sequence needs to be the last line of the last haiku posted. . .

crown of lovers fair


OOPS! See what happens when you're half-asleep and reading -- I'll get with the program.
 

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Smiling cat sleeps
beguiling, his grin in dream
faux-sweetness beckons
 
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faux-sweetness beckons
restaurant dessert tray tempts
with plastic delights
 

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she charges the mall
like a sprinter in a race
it's sale day today
 

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It's sale day today
what lovely wares shall I buy?
Perhaps some crystal...
 

rich

Perhaps some crystal

In some Godly place, will shine

More than your eyes...no.
 

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Treacherous to you
evil thoughts are dreamt, but no -
humanity wins.
 

rich

"Shows a single bud" would not be the start of much. I suggest that somebody can change it to something like "A single bud shows" (Hmm, that would've done just as well on my piece.)
 

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