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Hello! I'm looking for feedback on my current novel. It's an adult supernatural mystery with horror elements. I wrote it with a "Dresden Files meets Silent Hill" mood in mind.

Darina finds her hometown trending online because someone found some bodies. The town is abysmal, so she's not too surprised there. What does catch her eye is the fact those bodies were found on the same trail where, years ago, she slipped into another world, like a nightmare reflection of our own. Fearing her fantastical encounter might be involved -- that she might have paved the way for these deaths -- she returns to the town she barely escaped. Darina investigates the cause of these deaths and explores what she can do to prevent more. But some things are universal, even when the supernatural is involved. Namely, those with power don’t appreciate when that power is threatened.

Here's a link to the first chapter, posted in SYW: Here!

Content warnings:
Mild violence and language (PG-13, I'd say), with references to abuse, bullying and bigotry, though very little of this is depicted on-page.

Feedback:
I'm open to any comments that come to mind while you read, though based on prior feedback, my current focuses are: -Side characters not feeling fleshed out, like they're their own people. -The antagonist feeling weak/not intimidating

Swaps:
I'm open to swapping, though I admit I am a very finicky reader. I prefer SF/F, but I'll consider most genres. That said, I'm not the best fit for historical, romance genre, or stories that are nonlinear (occasional flashbacks are fine, of course).
 
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I'm looking for beta readers on my current project, EYES OF SILVER, an adult urban fantasy horror story. I wrote it with a "Dresden Files meets Silent Hill" mood in mind. No other writers have read it yet, so I'm primarily looking for 'big picture' comments on story, structure, character arcs and such, though I'm interested in any other comments you may have. I'm also interested in exactly what genre this work comes off as. Mostly Urban Fantasy with a little Horror? Entirely UF? Entirely Horror? Etc.

Quick Blurb:
22-year-old journalism major Dari wasn't surprised to see her abysmal hometown trending because someone had found some bodies. She was surprised to learn they were found on the same nature trail where she encountered haunting supernatural sights that she has repressed for years. Fearing her fantastical encounter might somehow be involved -- that she might be responsible, in part, for these deaths -- she returns to the town that had never felt like home. Putting her inquisitive mind to work, she seeks to uncover the cause of these deaths and do her damnedest to prevent any more. But some things are universal, even when the supernatural is involved: Those with power do not appreciate when those without stick their noses where they don't belong.

As for content warnings, there is a little profanity and violence. The book touches on some very heavy themes; mentions of abuse, bullying, and mental health concerns plague several characters, though very little is directly depicted on the page. I posted the first chapter in the fiction workshop, so you can take a look and get an idea if this book is up your alley or not.


I am open to swapping. I prefer Sci-Fi and Fantasy, but I'm open to almost any genre (outside of Middle Grade, Historical, and genre Romance, though romantic subplots are fine). I am usually able to finish reads within a month.

If you're interested, post here or PM me. I prefer sending my MS as a windows docx file through email, though Google Docs is also fine.
I'm seeking a beta reader for my first-contact SF novel, and am willing to swap. I've been a beta-reader in the past, though not often. The blurb and the first chapter have snagged my interest; a good start.

My project, THE SIREN SINGS ONLY FOR ME, has benefited from critiques in AW Share Your Work, and has gone through several rounds of editing and revision as a result. A short blurb:

All Meg Craddock wants is to get her life back.

Following a psychotic break and treatment at St. Guinefort’s psychiatric hospital in Wales, she plans to return to university. One day, Meg hears a voice in her head. Unlike the ones she heard in hospital, this one does not spew venom; it does not hiss
Lezzer! or Dyke! Instead it warns her of an imminent invasion of the solar system. “Raid alarm!” the voice cries. This voice is not a hallucination-and she can prove it.

Disclosure: The MS is on the long side, 157,700 words.

I look forward to hearing from you.
 
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Giving this an update post as I have just finished some revisions, and I am looking for more readers! :)
 

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Giving this an update post as I have just finished some revisions, and I am looking for more readers! :)
Hi,

How many words is it?

I wrote a medical comedy around 65,000 words and looking to a 2nd round of beta-swapping.

Thanks,
Paul
 

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Hi,

How many words is it?

I wrote a medical comedy around 65,000 words and looking to a 2nd round of beta-swapping.

Thanks,
Paul
That would be good information to share with beta readers, wouldn't it? 😅
It's 91k words. Added that info to the title. Sorry for the delayed response. I've been busy with finishing this year's NaNo.

I read the blurb you posted in SYW some time ago, and if this is for the same project (Laughing Gas) I don't feel like I'm the right audience for it.
 

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