Hello all.
I'd appreciate any feedback on this little story, which will be appearing on my blog for a contest next week.
Her gnarled knuckles ache with the pain of age and cold as she directs the brush this way and that across the upright canvas. Darkness is her comfort, her old friend, her nightly blanket. Darkness, because eyes clouded by cataracts require no light by which to see.
Swish.
The hog-hair brush runs dry. Methodically, she dips it down into the red on her palette. Blood-red. Virgin heart red, to be specific. It will make a lovely rosy colour on the portrait's cheeks. The flush of youth. Yes, she will be young again.
Brown the hair, brown harvested fresh just last night. The woodcutter's daughter, her lovely skin, her oak-coloured tresses. Pigtails, she wore. Pigtails no more. The body will be found soon enough.
The boiled-up bones of the baker's newborn babe give ample glue. The long brown locks lie beautiful along the portrait's hairline. How well they frame those flawless cheeks pinked by virgin blood.
Swish.
The finishing touches, now. Blue eyes, cornflower blue, to match the blue sky. The dress of the goat-herder's daughter, ripped to tatters. A wolf, they say. A wolf is fine for the woman. Let the wolf take the blame.
The eyes in place, sightless she stares at the vision of youthful beauty. A face to break a thousand hearts. Much better than the wrinkled, saggy flesh her real face has become. Wartless, hairless, free from liver-spots... yes, this face will do nicely.
She puts down the paintbrush and picks up the spell-book. A whimper draws her blind eyes to the corner of the cottage, where the blacksmith's daughter, fairest of the lot, lies bound and gagged.
Should she?
Yes. Why not? A new body to go with her new face. Smiling toothlessly, she picks up the wickedly curved knife.
I'd appreciate any feedback on this little story, which will be appearing on my blog for a contest next week.
The Portrait
Her gnarled knuckles ache with the pain of age and cold as she directs the brush this way and that across the upright canvas. Darkness is her comfort, her old friend, her nightly blanket. Darkness, because eyes clouded by cataracts require no light by which to see.
Swish.
The hog-hair brush runs dry. Methodically, she dips it down into the red on her palette. Blood-red. Virgin heart red, to be specific. It will make a lovely rosy colour on the portrait's cheeks. The flush of youth. Yes, she will be young again.
Brown the hair, brown harvested fresh just last night. The woodcutter's daughter, her lovely skin, her oak-coloured tresses. Pigtails, she wore. Pigtails no more. The body will be found soon enough.
The boiled-up bones of the baker's newborn babe give ample glue. The long brown locks lie beautiful along the portrait's hairline. How well they frame those flawless cheeks pinked by virgin blood.
Swish.
The finishing touches, now. Blue eyes, cornflower blue, to match the blue sky. The dress of the goat-herder's daughter, ripped to tatters. A wolf, they say. A wolf is fine for the woman. Let the wolf take the blame.
The eyes in place, sightless she stares at the vision of youthful beauty. A face to break a thousand hearts. Much better than the wrinkled, saggy flesh her real face has become. Wartless, hairless, free from liver-spots... yes, this face will do nicely.
She puts down the paintbrush and picks up the spell-book. A whimper draws her blind eyes to the corner of the cottage, where the blacksmith's daughter, fairest of the lot, lies bound and gagged.
Should she?
Yes. Why not? A new body to go with her new face. Smiling toothlessly, she picks up the wickedly curved knife.