It seems that over half my sentences seem to start with either "he/she/it", what "he/she/it's name is", or "the". How can I overcome this problem?
Is it a problem? Or is it your voice?
I mean, look at Hemingway. Pretty much every sentence he writes begins with "The {something} was {something}," or "He took a {something} out of the {something}," or similar.
It's not a huge problem, but I just feel that it gets rather repetitive.
Grab a few good books and study how the writers vary sentence structure. A basic English grammar could also be helpful -- it will give you examples of all the possibilities.
You should grab a few books to study how the writers vary sentence structure.
To study how writers vary sentence structure, grab a few good books.
If you want to study how writers vary sentence structure, you could grab a few good books.
Want to study how writers vary sentence structure? Grab a few good books!
Aaaaaaah! I was studying how to vary sentence structure when a few good books grabbed me!
When you read it out loud, does it seem boring? Or just simple?
"Simple" is good.
I'd much prefer a story written in direct Subject-Verb-Object sentences than the dangling participles so many people seem to use:
Running down the street, Tom saw the Dalai Lama surrounded by a group of acolytes. GAH! FLAIL!
This isn't a dangling participle if it's Tom who's running, which it must be, since the Dalai Lama never runs.
Here's a real dangler:
Running down the street, a tree fell on my head. (That couldn't have been a tree, it must have been an Ent! A clumsy Ent!)
You are correct. I was failed in writing as badly as I wanted to, thanks to years of training.
I hate the undangling participles, too, but what I actually meant to write was "Running down the street, the Dalai Lama and a crowd of acolytes captured Tom's attention" where it was, indeed, Tom who was running.
Clumsy Ents are the very worst kind.
Should "Tom was running down the street" just be "Tom ran down the street" ??
I know which one I like better.
Should "Tom was running down the street" just be "Tom ran down the street" ??
I know which one I like better.
P.S. Please inform me more on this dangling participial, for I do not know exactly what it is.
Join the club, hdawg. I didn't know either, it just sounded rude and/or painful.
See the participles, dangling or not thread and all will be revealed. It's an error you wouldn't want to make anyway, but I'm not sure it matters what it's called.
Sadly, poor old Tom had done far too much running around, the shock of the siren blasting so close to him was the last straw. A crowd of AW writers crowded around as he collpased, hoping for a good storyline. Gleefully they watched as he was scooped up and rushed to hosptal with a suspected coronary!
There are many ways to start a sentence, but to me, using a participial or prepositional clause, etc. only for variation's sake is just a crutch.