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I'm reading On the Run by Iris Johansen. It's a multi-published author I've never read before. The book is a thriller about a woman and her eight year old daughter who, up until the story begins, have been living on a horse ranch in hiding because the woman used to be kind of a spy. Well, the bad guys have found her and now she and her daughter are on the move again.
At first I found the story and writing style very promising. The author has a very lean writing style and doesn't waste a lot of time on lush descriptions and general wordiness. She even uses "said" so seldom that I've actually been learning how to cut more "saids" from my own manuscript.
But Oh. My. God. She totally overuses "She shook her head."
There's at least one on every page. Sometimes two, sometimes three. I have gotten so tired of reading "she shook her head" that I have seriously contemplated giving up on this novel. I would love to see the word "No" a little more often, but no. It's always "She shook her head."
It's driving me crazy! The only reason I've stuck it out as long as I have is because I want to see how the subplot of the bad guys chasing her pans out. I've started skimming the main plot because I can't read any more "She shook her head"s any longer.
Where was the editor? This was a big publisher. Didn't anyone at this publishing house say, "You know, I counted nearly a thousand instances of 'She shook her head' in this book. Think you could cut out a few?"
The novel shouldn't be titled "On the Run." A better title is "She Shakes Her Head."
All right, rant over.
allen
At first I found the story and writing style very promising. The author has a very lean writing style and doesn't waste a lot of time on lush descriptions and general wordiness. She even uses "said" so seldom that I've actually been learning how to cut more "saids" from my own manuscript.
But Oh. My. God. She totally overuses "She shook her head."
There's at least one on every page. Sometimes two, sometimes three. I have gotten so tired of reading "she shook her head" that I have seriously contemplated giving up on this novel. I would love to see the word "No" a little more often, but no. It's always "She shook her head."
It's driving me crazy! The only reason I've stuck it out as long as I have is because I want to see how the subplot of the bad guys chasing her pans out. I've started skimming the main plot because I can't read any more "She shook her head"s any longer.
Where was the editor? This was a big publisher. Didn't anyone at this publishing house say, "You know, I counted nearly a thousand instances of 'She shook her head' in this book. Think you could cut out a few?"
The novel shouldn't be titled "On the Run." A better title is "She Shakes Her Head."
All right, rant over.
allen