I read with interest Mum23's thread about "said." It brought a question to mind that is somewhat related. Sometimes when I'm writing dialog I want to interject a listener's observation or reaction in the middle rather than wait for the end of the statement which would involve more explanation than I want to get into.
George was Irate. "She's my daughter (If you only knew) so if you don't mind I'll take her with me right now."
Is there a better way to do it?
George was Irate. "She's my daughter (If you only knew) so if you don't mind I'll take her with me right now."
Is there a better way to do it?