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William Haskins
03-02-2005, 06:01 AM
open your latest project, and copy/paste the very last sentence you wrote.

i dare you.

JenNipps
03-02-2005, 06:09 AM
open your latest project, and copy/paste the very last sentence you wrote.

"And that’s how it started."

(From "Marathon," a short story.)

Maryn
03-02-2005, 06:42 AM
Only on her son’s death would she realize how little she stood to gain--but Wang knew now.

(From the middle of a novel in progress)

maestrowork
03-02-2005, 06:57 AM
The last sentence in my WIP:

She hesitated for a second, then ran up the steps, unlatched the gate and slipped inside the house.


But this is the sentence I last wrote:

"And we'll kill it."

three seven
03-02-2005, 07:07 AM
"She's in the garden."

:Shrug:

paprikapink
03-02-2005, 07:11 AM
"Berries, whatever they were, sounded good."

WVWriterGirl
03-02-2005, 07:12 AM
They really had no choice; the Mother had seen to that.

WVWG

SRHowen
03-02-2005, 07:14 AM
Why would I even think such a thing, much less say it?

Mark Anderson
03-02-2005, 09:02 AM
"Now I only eat vegetarian."

William Haskins
03-02-2005, 09:05 AM
"Love and joy and happiness, those are just masks we wear."

Jonathon Michaels
03-02-2005, 09:21 AM
"I think there is much you aren’t telling.”

aka eraser
03-02-2005, 09:32 AM
"But you can’t always explain what you observe."

Last line (unless I change it) of this week's column.

CACTUSWENDY
03-02-2005, 09:51 AM
:snoopy: ....The end

SRHowen
03-02-2005, 09:52 AM
ROFL

This is funny. Read them all together as if they were part of a whole, they make a kinda weird sense.

Shawn

maestrowork
03-02-2005, 10:19 AM
Shawn, that's true... it's weird!

Especially these together (mind not the tense changes):

And that's how it started. Only on her son’s death would she realize how little she stood to gain--but Wang knew now. They really had no choice; the Mother had seen to that. Love and joy and happiness, those are just masks we wear.

She's in the garden. Berries, whatever they were, sounded good. She hesitated for a second, then ran up the steps, unlatched the gate and slipped inside the house.

"Why would I even think such a thing, much less say it? I think there is much you aren’t telling. But you can’t always explain what you observe. Now I only eat vegetarian."

The end.

:ROFL:

Renee
03-02-2005, 10:27 AM
Now that all seemed well I stopped waiting for the bomb to drop.

*from Afterglow of a Virgo*

triceretops
03-02-2005, 10:57 AM
"When I impacted the glidewalk I lost both my bio contacts--I'm afraid my vision is off." FROM NOVEL--WORD WARS

"A species that originated in China had a likeness to both cave and North American lions some 350,000 years ago." FROM NON-FIC BOOK--VALLEY OF THE MASTODONS, THE ICE AGE DISCOVERIES OF HEMET, CALIFORNIA.

Triceratops

mdin
03-02-2005, 11:18 AM
what a great idea for a thread.

Over 20,000 tentacles hung mercilessly from the massive beast, each as thick as a temple spire, each as long as eternity, each ripping absolute destruction upon anything that comes anywhere near its poisonous skin.
:Wha:

Jonathon Michaels
03-02-2005, 12:09 PM
ROFL

This is funny. Read them all together as if they were part of a whole, they make a kinda weird sense.

Shawn

I'm so glad I wasn't the only one to see this. I was afraid to post it though, for fear those guys outside in the white van with the white jackets might finally actually knock on the door...

JennaGlatzer
03-02-2005, 12:38 PM
"She may think she’s showing you that she cares and that you appreciate it."

pianoman5
03-02-2005, 01:13 PM
The unseeing leading the blind in a quest of ignorance.

Nivvie
03-02-2005, 02:20 PM
'Give me a poke if I nod off.'

SRHowen
03-02-2005, 03:17 PM
FOMCLMAO (falling off my chair laughing my *** off)

It's still working. This is too funny and weird. So are we to learn from this that no matter what you do with words they will make an odd sorta sense? It is then our own minds that create sense and order? Or is it the thousand monkey idea?

Shawn

Lisa Y
03-02-2005, 03:47 PM
"How long do you think it's been here?"

:o

maestrowork
03-02-2005, 05:15 PM
Shawn,

I see a new project in the making -- Atlanta Night 2: Last Words.

Spookster
03-02-2005, 05:31 PM
She recognized the fresh linen scent lingering in the air.

(As of yet untitled short.)

tjwriter
03-02-2005, 05:56 PM
For these animals, she sent reassuring messages.

TwoKeys
03-02-2005, 06:06 PM
Berta sets her cleaning supplies down and heads to Jake’s bedroom.


(Spec for "Two and a Half Men")

Shiny_Penguin
03-02-2005, 06:18 PM
He had sight.

BradyH1861
03-02-2005, 08:32 PM
"I have always believed that riding in a speeding firetruck with lights flashing and siren blaring is better than all but the very best sex."

Betty W01
03-02-2005, 08:40 PM
[thus explaining why Brady chose to become a fireman...]

She might be turing forty - no, it was after midnight now, she was forty - but she could still kick that girl’s ***!

[from an unfinished short story called - for now - Turing Forty In Bobby Lee's Place]

ZaZ
03-02-2005, 08:55 PM
“I know.”

ChunkyC
03-02-2005, 08:58 PM
Together they turned to the right and began to trot along the majic shield, but before long, it turned into an all-out run.

(in the midst of being edited because of the repeated 'turned' and similarity of 'long/along')

MacAllister
03-02-2005, 10:08 PM
"So do you know that guy?" she asked.

SRHowen
03-02-2005, 10:15 PM
Shawn,

I see a new project in the making -- Atlanta Night 2: Last Words.

LOL I was thinking along the same lines.

What a hoot, it is still working, that is so strange.

Shawn

tfdswift
03-02-2005, 11:14 PM
This is from a WIP:

She laid back on her new bed, snuggled into the hide and fell into a deep sleep.

~~Tammy

triceretops
03-02-2005, 11:56 PM
Gak! Jenna? I hope you're not talking about Celine.

Shawn, I hope to Gawd we've progressed past the 1000 primates, randomly hammering out a script. Although I sometimes cock an inquiring eyebrow. I know, I know...speak for yourself Trisnubatops!

But I just dare, double dang dare ya to put my lions into the script without bustin' up the continuity. I shall wait for a fantasy script!
Tri

triceretops
03-02-2005, 11:57 PM
I spoke too soon. Swift has got something going on there with the hide. Hmmm..

Tri

MacAllister
03-03-2005, 12:00 AM
(Shawn--I think you're right. Our minds want to make a story out of the words. We look for meaning not just in the immediate words themselves, but in the surrounding context. In the absence of that meaning, our imagination creates one...)

arrowqueen
03-03-2005, 02:57 AM
'You were right - it's amazing what you can pick up in a charity shop!'

awatkins
03-03-2005, 03:03 AM
"This is normal and is nothing to be concerned about."

BradyH1861
03-03-2005, 03:33 AM
'You were right - it's amazing what you can pick up in a charity shop!'

I dont EVEN want to know!

:roll:

Brady H.

awatkins
03-03-2005, 03:41 AM
(Laughing at MacAllister...really, there's nothing to worry about. Nothing. At. All. :D )

MacAllister
03-03-2005, 03:43 AM
LOL--you gotta admit...in this context...):Ssh:

awatkins
03-03-2005, 03:48 AM
:roll:

CaoPaux
03-03-2005, 04:00 AM
"If you will take no payment, may I offer a round of refreshment?”

mdin
03-03-2005, 04:10 AM
new day, new line.

"'Is that what your sister wants?'"

William Haskins
03-03-2005, 04:18 AM
"Any secrets my father had he took to his grave."

SRHowen
03-03-2005, 07:09 AM
Did I remember how to do this after so many years?

my line for today--that sounds bad out of context.

Shawn

WVWriterGirl
03-03-2005, 07:23 AM
Lilly hopped into Big Daddy’s lap, and the two of them caressed, stroked and touched while they waited for their new play thing to wake up.

(Ending of short story)

WVWG

oswann
03-03-2005, 04:21 PM
'Whatever it is Frank, the answer is no.'


This is a little depressing if some hidden meaning can be found at the places where one chooses to stop.

Os.

SRHowen
03-04-2005, 03:01 AM
OH man, just showed my hubby this thread and we have been laughing our butts off----

Shawn

rhymegirl
03-04-2005, 03:18 AM
"I must be falling in love."

JennaGlatzer
03-04-2005, 03:29 AM
"Chromium is one of 15 trace elements essential for proper lipid and carbohydrate metabolism."

(I apologize for writing nonfiction.)

TemlynWriting
03-04-2005, 03:38 AM
"Chromium is one of 15 trace elements essential for proper lipid and carbohydrate metabolism."

(I apologize for writing nonfiction.)


;) Don't apologize Jenna. You're not the only one. :)

You know, I didn't think nonfiction could be much fun until I realized that biographies and other such real-life stories are nonfiction. I write some information articles here and there, but I love writing nonfiction about events and people. It can be quite interesting. At the moment I'm writing a piece about my grandfather, and it's heartwarming and fun at the same time. I'm reading a book about writing right now, and it's absolutely hilarious, full of fun anecdotes that make me not want to put it down.

Oh, and here's my submission for the thread:

"Who would have guessed that such a gesture would become one of my earliest and most treasured memories?"

(Reading the last three together are hilarious, as is the whole thread!)

"I must be falling in love."
"Chromium is one of 15 trace elements essential for proper lipid and carbohydrate metabolism."
"Who would have guessed that such a gesture would become one of my earliest and most treasured memories?"

rtilryarms
03-04-2005, 06:37 AM
"I simply went to the Government Center across the street,paid a couple of dollars and viola!"

William Haskins
03-05-2005, 01:08 AM
"You can’t be hero and a coward at the same time."

maestrowork
03-05-2005, 01:45 AM
"He listened."


(new day, new line)

ChunkyC
03-05-2005, 02:09 AM
"How is my sister?" she said without turning from the window.

maestrowork
03-05-2005, 02:26 AM
I really do think we have weird novel in the making. LOL.

ChunkyC
03-05-2005, 02:43 AM
Let's submit it to They-who-never-turn-it-down. http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/images/smilies/wink.gif

arrowqueen
03-05-2005, 03:24 AM
Kev was right - she was getting too old to be a Tooth Fairy.

awatkins
03-05-2005, 04:23 AM
I love that line, aq!! :ROFL:

SRHowen
03-05-2005, 05:42 AM
My line for today:

The elk carving sat on a stone near the fire and appeared to prance about in the fluttering fire light.

Shawn

Virtuoso
03-05-2005, 06:09 AM
(Sadly, from nothing more exciting than an essay 'Prolegomena to Any Future Epistemology'): "The logic of the world is not their own; they must either learn the laws that order life, or abandon life for abitrary laws."

WVWriterGirl
03-05-2005, 06:15 AM
He knew Mindtap was an industry leader, but he wondered about how forward-thinking the world would have to be to accept what Exjay was proposing.

WVWG

allion
03-05-2005, 07:33 AM
"My brother is again above the ground."

--from Soul of the Demon, a work very much in progress...

Karen

Kida Adelyne
03-05-2005, 05:38 PM
He puzzled over her remark, not sure what she had meant, but didn’t ask because she had started eating.

ChunkyC
03-05-2005, 08:46 PM
"My brother is again above the ground."
He puzzled over her remark, not sure what she had meant, but didn’t ask because she had started eating.

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/images/smilies/Emoterofl5.gifhttp://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/images/smilies/EmoteROFL.gif

Oh, that's just friggin' priceless!

William Haskins
03-05-2005, 10:37 PM
A flame snapped from her lighter and kissed the tip of her cigarette with a whispered singe.

triceretops
03-06-2005, 03:02 AM
Arrowqueen, you slay me with that. you GOT something goin' on with a past the prime-age tooth fairy! Sounds like some Roald Dahl, which suckered me right in.

Triceratops

Dawno
03-07-2005, 04:18 AM
"What if it's from the killer?"

maestrowork
03-07-2005, 04:30 AM
"F---ing freak."

Jonathon Michaels
03-07-2005, 04:34 AM
Picking up her new fork, she went on her way.

Maybe that should be before the one above me. Hmmmm...

allion
03-07-2005, 04:44 AM
New day, new line:

He had abandoned the survivors to the wreckage he had created.

Karen

(These lines would make one strange book)

SRHowen
03-07-2005, 07:11 AM
Under the pain and anger, though, I saw something dangerous.

zeprosnepsid
03-07-2005, 10:15 AM
They look at each other thinking, ‘I could so easily have been you’.

I was worried when I read this, because I had no idea what the last thing I wrote was but I felt obliged to post it no matter what it was. I was impressed when it was something that sounded kind of nice like that. I'm writing non-fiction, so it mostly doesn't sound like that =)

William Haskins
03-07-2005, 10:29 AM
Sometimes, I reminded myself, the mind must be whipped, like a top, until it spins with its own momentum.

Fractured_Chaos
03-07-2005, 03:08 PM
"This is normal and is nothing to be concerned about."

Those words always scare me! :scared:



The equipment wasn't as much of a challenge as sifting through the absorbed information on covering his trail, getting the codes to work, and getting the "virus" out.

oswann
03-07-2005, 04:14 PM
'Why do I like you Frank?'
'Lost Dog Syndrome?'


Oh now I'm really depressed.

Os.

MacAllister
03-07-2005, 04:15 PM
"Just being sociable," I told her.

Sarita
03-07-2005, 10:19 PM
Huiracocha knows this.

Sara

underthecity
03-07-2005, 10:26 PM
Once again the attendees were families, proving that history repeats itself, even at the drive-in movie.

(Stepping Out in Cincinnati, due December, 2005)

underthecity

Rob-rite
03-07-2005, 10:33 PM
......magnificent buttocks.

Sarita
03-07-2005, 10:51 PM
......magnificent buttocks.


Nice first post!

Virtuoso
03-07-2005, 10:59 PM
"Don't hit me with that!"

arrowqueen
03-08-2005, 02:55 AM
'She's not a ghost - we are.'

Shiny_Penguin
03-08-2005, 03:15 AM
"We will be gracious."

katiemac
03-08-2005, 04:07 AM
Not only is this a fun read, it's a magnificient prompt thread.

maestrowork
03-08-2005, 04:13 AM
This film simply leaves a rather unsatisfying aftertaste for me, and that's not very cool.

katiemac
03-08-2005, 04:47 AM
This film simply leaves a rather unsatisfying aftertaste for me, and that's not very cool.

Your review, perhaps, of Be Cool? :tongue

rhymegirl
03-08-2005, 06:07 AM
"I'm having fun getting there."

William Haskins
03-08-2005, 08:24 AM
"So what now... fight or flight?"

William Haskins
03-11-2005, 07:46 PM
"Just fate. That’s all."

SRHowen
03-12-2005, 03:01 AM
Let me know if there is anything else you need me to add.

(sorry, wrote a reference letter for someone today, and I won't get time to write later so this is my last line for the day)

Shawn

arrowqueen
03-12-2005, 03:55 AM
Locked in the freezer, Sam grinned, despite his chattering teeth - not long now!

(So it's a bit unfrotunate that the girl he's been stalking has just buggered off on holiday for a fortnight.)

arrowqueen
03-12-2005, 03:55 AM
'Unfortunate', even.

Inspired
03-12-2005, 10:26 PM
(This is depressing. I went to my novel-in-progress, to post a line here, and found out that I lost all my files. I was stupid and saved them all on a disk, which is now corrupted. Ah, well, it was only a partial outline with one chapter fleshed out. And, I do have a hard copy of that one chapter. But, I had a lot more than just that on the disk. Stupid ... stupid ... stupid!)

Kida Adelyne
03-13-2005, 03:31 AM
(Awww. :Hug2:. Happens to everyone sometime)

jdkiggins
03-13-2005, 03:42 AM
The other three were also among the dead and unfortunately were unable to confirm or collaborate her story.

Joanne

Birol
03-13-2005, 09:29 AM
Her voice sounded small even to her ears.

Birol
03-13-2005, 09:31 AM
Did I remember how to do this after so many years?

my line for today--that sounds bad out of context.

Shawn

Oh, Shawn, my mind is adding plenty of context to that line. :roll:

jdkiggins
03-13-2005, 06:55 PM
"My help! You want help from a crazy woman?" That's what he'd called her when they last spoke.


Joanne

Sarita
03-14-2005, 05:49 AM
This life will not take long.

three seven
03-14-2005, 06:08 AM
12:23:17.

Cate
03-14-2005, 06:32 AM
"Enjoy!"

aspier
03-14-2005, 09:32 AM
Let's pump this up to over a 1000 views and then congratulations William! The most popular thread in the new history of WRITE!

Cool

aspier

SRHowen
03-14-2005, 07:01 PM
Yesterday's last line:

The ground swallowed him.

Shawn

jdkiggins
03-14-2005, 10:18 PM
Mary Ellen hadn't spoken of what they had unearthed that day until she realized she was the only one left to tell the story.


Joanne

jdkiggins
03-15-2005, 12:36 AM
(This is my last line for today. I managed to write 1,500 words today. :) I have to take my eighty-one-year-old mom out to dinner.)

She wondered how many people had died in her hometown since then.

Joanne

Kida Adelyne
03-15-2005, 06:23 AM
She swam closer, and poking her head above the water, she saw it was a small row boat.

Sarita
03-15-2005, 06:24 AM
I question everything.

sassandgroove
03-15-2005, 11:23 PM
Sinking down into her bed, she sobbed until sleep came.

SRHowen
03-16-2005, 12:18 AM
Her gaze locked with mine, she paused in her abuse of the vegetation, then bent the grass in half as if she would try to rip it in two.

KellyS.
03-16-2005, 10:28 AM
Only in hindsight did he see it.

Pthom
03-16-2005, 02:56 PM
He never learned her last name.

arrowqueen
03-17-2005, 02:46 AM
'Didn't you know? I'm your new step-mother.'

Vipersniper
03-18-2005, 03:37 AM
:Jump: And now as Paul Harvey would say, "for the rest of this here story."

ChunkyC
03-19-2005, 01:29 AM
"Deploy your men."

jdkiggins
03-19-2005, 01:43 AM
As she pushed the end button on her cell phone, she wished she'd sold it along with everything else when she'd left.

Joanne

Fictionalizer
03-21-2005, 06:06 AM
Tranquilizers?

sgtsdaughter
03-21-2005, 06:11 AM
There wasn't a dry eye in the room.

jdkiggins
03-21-2005, 06:13 AM
Where comfort began death followed.

Mac H.
03-22-2005, 10:41 AM
Sebastian walks down the street, following her.


FADE OUT.

sassandgroove
03-22-2005, 07:44 PM
But she emmerged from the flames, as did her writings, while the rest of the building fell to ashes.

Ellison
03-23-2005, 01:37 AM
Her eyes followed him, until he disappeared as quickly as he came into her life.

Dawno
03-23-2005, 08:24 AM
She wondered why he left $43 for one beer.

sgtsdaughter
03-23-2005, 08:27 AM
yup, last line of a section from my diss . . . i think that it will still add to the humor.

Her imagery reinforces the heterosexual bond of femininity, and both men and women can relate to the sexual messages in the advertisement—men longing for the beautiful woman (who represents the nation) and women staying beautiful and alluring for the victorious return of men from the battlefront.

shugar
03-23-2005, 08:51 AM
"Well, he'd be a very lucky dog if he took a shine to ya Dan. "

jdkiggins
03-24-2005, 01:41 AM
The familiar male voice, loud and guttural, enforced her dark mood and convinced her she had stayed too long.

maestrowork
03-24-2005, 01:44 AM
"Please don't go."

arrowqueen
03-24-2005, 03:23 AM
Her guardian angel hadn't been on strike at all - it had been working overtime.

jdkiggins
03-24-2005, 03:30 AM
When the door opened and a tall slender man rose from the vehicle, she knew in an instant who he was.

VA Buckeye
03-25-2005, 07:32 AM
The taste of copper reached her lips before she could say, “General Hughes.”

maestrowork
03-25-2005, 05:09 PM
"The wounds don't match?"

Sarita
05-17-2006, 08:45 PM
"Ask me any questions before I head out, but after I have my coffee."

(I missed this thread...)

badducky
05-17-2006, 09:17 PM
Nice thread, WHH

"He had heard that Grigora had a few friends that had gone sour over the mark, and needed a blood monkey on their tail, now."

samgail
05-17-2006, 09:18 PM
The high tide mark leaves a grungy rim of tangled seaweed and branches intertwined above the dry sand in an incongruous shout of natural exuburance-I was here!

NeuroFizz
05-17-2006, 09:46 PM
“Thank you, dear. Tomorrow. You tell him.”

P.H.Delarran
05-17-2006, 10:03 PM
Now nod your head side to side real slow, eyes closed, there sings that golden trumpet again, feel the glow against your face and breathe deep while the symbols crash, causing the waves that drift you away.

PattiTheWicked
05-17-2006, 10:12 PM
"Dante looked at me with his flat reptilian eyes and said, "It's become rather apparent, Daniel Rogan, that you do not in fact exist."

From "The Ballad of Liza Rogan"

Sarita
05-17-2006, 10:21 PM
"Haven't you heard of the bog people? The peat preserves!"

From a new short story, Doonagore.

Shadow_Ferret
05-17-2006, 10:28 PM
"Of course I did." She smiled. "Hope you took some E at least."

aka eraser
05-17-2006, 10:37 PM
Dad died a couple of years ago and I looked for that picture among the hundreds nestled in boxes and drawers but I couldn’t find it.

mdin
05-17-2006, 10:38 PM
It was pretty cool reading this whole thread, even if it's old.


The brackish water moved sluggishly through his gills when he exhaled, coating the inside of his mouth with a thin film of gunk.

Jaycinth
05-17-2006, 10:52 PM
"Blood. I can drink blood."

From 'Shiva's Dance'. (first draft of 'book the third' and, sorry, it is Sci-Fi, I'm afraid. . . )

GPatten
05-17-2006, 11:01 PM
From my WIP, The Life of a Terrorist Assassin:

The last words Ara spoke before she was assonated were, “America will belong to me within five years.”

reph
05-17-2006, 11:02 PM
(I can't. It would mean giving the solution to a puzzle to which I'm going to sell all rights.)

(I know! I'll leave out the numbers.)

SOLUTION
The company has ___ division chiefs, ___ managers, and ___ clerks.

James M M Baldwin
05-17-2006, 11:16 PM
The water was crystal clear and the dark surface of the island could be seen beneath its slow moving surface.

pconsidine
05-17-2006, 11:18 PM
"Because the real power of the circus is to carry you away from the ordinary and Cirkestra’s music is guaranteed to do just that."


From a review I wrote of my cousin's latest album. For those looking for a bit of musical novelty, check it out. www.cirkestra.com (gotta plug for the boy. It's not like there are all that many people into circus music).

ChaosTitan
05-18-2006, 12:08 AM
"If you don't like it, you can come home and pickle in your own B.O. for the rest of your natural, lonely life."

Stew21
05-18-2006, 12:55 AM
The lake exists exactly the same while those who come here change.

dahmnait
05-18-2006, 01:02 AM
She lives in me, but I don't know her yet.

Jcomp
05-18-2006, 01:21 AM
The street stretched ahead of her until it vanished into a thick palette of steam rising from grates in the pavement.

astonwest
05-18-2006, 01:57 AM
Her screams echoed through the chamber.

jst5150
05-18-2006, 02:16 AM
From "The Cerebus Dream":

I decided to give Trixie Banks a call, too.

DragonHeart
05-18-2006, 02:25 AM
She didn't flinch.

Ol' Fashioned Girl
05-18-2006, 02:31 AM
While her contemporaries were marrying at fourteen, having babies year after year after year and dying before their time, she was using the nickel-plated six shooter she holds lovingly cradled in her lap.

jackie106
05-18-2006, 02:36 AM
Ethan punched me lightly in the arm, "Hey Maggie, when did you get out of the joint?"

louisgodwin
05-18-2006, 04:26 AM
Freshmen are always prime targets for high school bullies. Their meek countenances seemingly give off the scent of blood, attracting predators from across the campus.


(This is from my second novel, which was started quite a long while back, but has had very little work done to it over the past few months. Yeah, yeah, I know it's two sentences and not one. But I didn't feel the 2nd sentence makes sense without the 1st.)

Sage
05-18-2006, 04:50 AM
"There was a good chance it would be her last struggle ever."

DamaNegra
05-18-2006, 07:21 AM
"Lo sombrío de la melodía no le quitaba la belleza a la canción; jamás había tocado una pieza tan hermosa y cargada de sentimientos como aquella."

Translation:

"The melody, although somber, emanated a beautiful essence; I'd never played such a beautiful and sentimental piece as that one."

From my WIP, "A Los Ojos del Amor"

unthoughtknown
05-18-2006, 07:24 AM
He remained on the stairs for another half a minute or so while he wondered why kids had to make everything so bloody complicated.

AlienEeeter
05-18-2006, 07:27 AM
“I’m sorry it’s all I could give you.”

from 'The Swan and the Wolf' a short story I've been fighting with since feb.

SpookyWriter
05-18-2006, 07:28 AM
God bless!

pconsidine
05-18-2006, 05:10 PM
I didn't feel the 2nd sentence makes sense without the 1st.I thought that was the point of the whole thing. ;)

Bret
05-18-2006, 05:20 PM
over an Italian sea

three seven
05-18-2006, 06:55 PM
"Stay back!"

Serenity
05-18-2006, 07:34 PM
"So? Who says that sarcasm can't produce a good idea or two?" she shot right back in that tone of voice that he just couldn't argue with.

PeeDee
05-18-2006, 10:08 PM
Clenched against his chest, the sword grew warm and seemed to alternate between being terribly heavy and not weighted at all.

Saint Fool
05-18-2006, 10:15 PM
"The wolf-dog was waiting for her with Bun-Bun pressed under his paw."

PeeDee
05-18-2006, 10:17 PM
"The wolf-dog was waiting for her with Bun-Bun pressed under his paw."

If it's Bun-Bun from Sluggy Freelance, that wolf-dog won't last very long. :)

rwam
05-18-2006, 11:42 PM
"I'd say about eight years."

DamaNegra
05-18-2006, 11:47 PM
El vacío las repetiría y haría eco con ellas, dejándolas vagar, patéticas, por la habitación, recordándome que las palabras ya no eran suficientes.

Translates to something like:

The void would repeat them and make echo with them, letting them stray, pathetic, through the room, reminding me that words were no longer enough.

Perks
05-21-2006, 09:04 PM
Standing next to Tim Bayard in his living room, admiring the blacklit glow of the white stripes in his handsome golf shirt, never had a man so dearly wished for a time machine and a match.

KimJo
05-21-2006, 09:38 PM
She hurried out of the cafeteria, ignoring the stares of a couple of her former friends.

(From a YA WIP.)

Susie
05-21-2006, 11:57 PM
"And these are...your children."

From "Alien-ation of Affection." Sci-fi story in The Sacred Twilight publication online.

Stew21
09-27-2006, 09:32 PM
"His heart broke as the young immortal Oliver Crowe vanished from the backseat, and he imagined that his father wept."


**I deleted the second have because i think the sentence is too long, first draft and all. :)

dclary
09-27-2006, 09:58 PM
This is a writer's board, not ESPN. How about we discuss apples on the apple board, and oranges on the orange board?

Stew21
09-27-2006, 09:59 PM
This is a writer's board, not ESPN. How about we discuss apples on the apple board, and oranges on the orange board?

you goofball, from your WIP, not your last post!
:D

Bubastes
09-27-2006, 10:01 PM
She couldn't bring herself to read them in the car, partly because she couldn't stand much more pain and partly because she knew she'd become carsick if she tried.

==============
(from my WIP)

I like the Atlanta Nights 2 idea!

TsukiRyoko
09-27-2006, 10:03 PM
"The occasional cactus stood stoid against the desert canvas."

davids
09-27-2006, 10:04 PM
. The head was tossed to the heavens then the genuflected monarch of Henry’s Hill rolled softly face first, into the sodden steamy king’s ransom.

dclary
09-27-2006, 10:13 PM
you goofball, from your WIP, not your last post!
:D

Hey! As a PMP, posts ARE my WIPs!

clockwork
09-28-2006, 01:46 AM
Environmetal protection officers investigating the scene detected a noticeable smell in the area but assured residents that the problem was more likely caused by sewage than fast food.

underthecity
09-28-2006, 01:50 AM
Okay, but out of context, this is going to sound kind of weird:

“Fine. Arthur? Just stand over there, Rachel, you take the Ouija board.”

(from Ghost Machine, coming 2007, or '08, or '09. . . )

allen

Rachael
09-28-2006, 01:56 AM
okay, so it's not actually my WIP, and I sort of wrote it for someone else, but...

The shudder slapped against the house like her last client's hand against her cheek.

Raiyah
09-28-2006, 02:01 AM
"I would go on pretending that there was nothing wrong for as long as I could"

From my WIP, "Exile"

ChaosTitan
09-28-2006, 05:02 AM
Ooooh, I forgot about this thread...


"After that night a sense of unease crept into his mind. Something had started with that kiss, something frightening that he wouldn't be able to stop when it chose to arrive."

From the WIP I've been adding to like a maniac this week, "The Judas Factor."

DamaNegra
09-28-2006, 05:04 AM
"Sus dedos comenzaron a retorcerse, necesitaban un cigarro prendido entre ellos para sentirse tranquilos."

Translation:

His fingers started to twitch, they needed a lit cigarette between them to feel at ease.

expatbrat
09-28-2006, 09:14 AM
“You are so dumped,” I flatly informed him and walked off to play pool with a bunch of other guys who gave me the attention I hoped they would.

SeanDSchaffer
09-28-2006, 10:40 AM
From a vignette I typed this morning:

The mage had saved the kingdom, after all, and showed his prowess....just not in the way he had originally thought he would.

dclary
09-28-2006, 11:11 AM
Simon crouched down, and started digging absently with his hands, picking small stones from the dirt. "'Repent therefore of this thy wickedness, and pray God, if perhaps the thought of thine heart be forgiven thee. For I perceive that thou art in the gall of bitterness, and the bond of iniquity.'"

Ignacious cocked his head. "Then answered Simon, and said 'Pray ye to the Lord for me, that non of these things which ye have spoken come upon me.' Acts 8:22-24."

A wistful smile came to Simon. "Then spake Peter, 'Verily I tell ye that unless ye die, the day of the Lord shall not be upon us.'"

"That's not in the Bible," Ignacious said.

"No, and Peter told me that in Greek. I just like how it sounds in old English."

Wendy rose up from Mandini's broken body. "No way."

Simon nodded. He stood back up as well, tossing the largest stone he'd gathered away. "Some scholars believe that my death will signal the beginning of Christ's return."

"The Apocalypse."

Again Simon nodded.

Ignacious placed his hand on Simon's shoulder. "There are other scholars who say you died in holy battle against St. Paul."

"Sid wasn't the first one to die protecting me, Father."

A power began emanating from Simon, subtle at first, like a wave of high pressure bearing down on them all. Soon the very air began distorting around him. He clenched his fists, gritted his jaw, and brought the power back under control.

"Handsome John thinks I have the power I begged Peter for. He thinks I have the power I fought Paul for. He wants that power more than anything else. He was my partner in Samaria, and he lusts for the things he thinks I have."

"Do you?" the kid asked. "Do you have that power?"

Simon smiled at him. His familiar, disarming smile. "Doesn't matter." Another blast of power nearly knocked them all off their feet. "I'm tired of running. Tired of hiding. Tired of holding in the magic.

"Tonight, Handsome John pays. Tonight, Handsome John dies."

K1P1
09-28-2006, 04:21 PM
He at least had the satisfaction of seeing the destruction of his pouffy mane in the mirror before he was forced to sit through restyling on Monday.

aadams73
09-28-2006, 04:30 PM
Only William and his dead penis stood between me and the money shots.

Soccer Mom
09-28-2006, 05:34 PM
Wow. Not sure how to follow the last one, but...

He was sure that by tommorrow he would be the fastest boy in the world.

dclary
09-28-2006, 05:58 PM
Only William and his dead penis stood between me and the money shots.

See, I don't believe you at all. This does not sound like something out of a real WIP.

Cheater!

Cheater!!!!!

;)

aadams73
09-28-2006, 06:46 PM
No way! Here's the surrounding text:


*snippety snip*

dclary
09-28-2006, 07:06 PM
No way! Here's the surrounding text:

Now it was up to me to snag the proof. Only William and his dead penis stood between me and the money shots.
I cleared my throat.
"I supposed you want me to move," he said, clearly miffed.
"I could take the picture right through you if you like." And I could, but the result would be a photo blurred by something that looked like watery custard.
"I slept with your grandmother, you know."
"So did half of Greenleaf," I said, unimpressed. My grandmother hadn't been exactly difficult in her youth. Word was that they used to call her mint julep because she went down easy on a hot summer day.
"She was lousy."
"Maybe you should have bought her dinner first."

Ok, I take it back.

But can I add that you write some weird stuff?

aadams73
09-28-2006, 07:07 PM
Hmm...no, you can't add that. :D

jessie40j
09-28-2006, 07:09 PM
"Don't worry Jake, I have a friend who has a place out in the country. A place where you and Clare can hide. A place where no can find you. A place where no one will ever find either of you!"


the end


or is it just the beginning


(wip...my first book..."Find Me" you did ask for the last line ya know)

BardSkye
09-28-2006, 09:15 PM
"He sighed and summoned another servant to help him throw the bodies to the baklan trees."

Chorale, in the middle of rewrites.

davids
09-28-2006, 11:16 PM
The reverend Cannon Noble, a great rusty Irish man who had fallen out of his birth place and its’ church and had been forced to immigrate to Canada with three illegitimate children, whose lover Clara Fenigrate had yelled at him that he was a great son of a bvtch, and she would never marry him if he was the last man on earth, who had never stopped yelling and beating him on the back, who should have been forced to leave with him, but was too strong for the people of her village who had ridiculed and ostracized her, that would spit in the face of a hurricane if it dared fling itself at her, that had stood on the end of Pierces’ Wharf as the ship with her children and Cannon Noble sailed off into the Atlantic and had continued to scream at him that he was the biggest son of a bvtch on God’s earth, and that Noble had turned his back on and shielded the ears of there children from, who hadn’t seen her fall off the end of the wharf still screaming as she fell, as she drowned to death, stood at the entrance to his church and greeted everyone of his parishioners individually shaking their hands regardless of age or sex, kissing the babies too small.

Jack_Roberts
09-29-2006, 12:05 AM
“I’ll get our things, Ann. It would not do for the landlady to see you using incredible strength at the tender age of ten.”

Ann groaned, “I am so sick of pretending to be a little girl! I want so bad to stretch my wings! I’ve been cooped up on that ship for what seemed like an eternity.”

He kissed her on the head, “Just a little longer and we’ll hunt. Then you can stretch your wings all you like.”

From ANNABELLE AND ROLAND, THE THREATS FROM SEA AND SHADOW

If my first novel gets published, then this, the sequil, might not be far off.

SeanDSchaffer
09-29-2006, 07:49 AM
From my present WIP:



His body, unable to take the strain of the 24-hour day he had worked, slipped into unconsciousness.