Re: Micro-flash challenge
One light shone in the otherwise empty room.
Then I saw you. My sister, in your white pajamas, your face gaunt and pale. I let out a breath as you turned to me and smiled.
I feel the release of tension and hope here.
You knew. Tommy Sutton had been executed an hour before for his crime. You knew.
Sorrow, pain.
"I gotta go, Danny," you said. You smiled one more time before disappearing with the light.
I wondered what happened to the light and how that related to the sister.
I didn't forget. "Happy Birthday," I yelled, my words swollowed by the dark space.
The misspelling of "swallowed" brought me out of the story, somewhat. Back to the story, I'm sensing a mystery. Why did the sister leave and why did you wait till she was gone to say happy birthday?
Tomorrow would have been your seventh birthday. I just wanted you to know, that I loved you.
The use of "would have been" indicates that the sister wasn't really there, and she won't be there the next day to have her birthday. I want to know why. I want to know who Tommy is and what he has to do with it. Maybe Tommy, the executed one, is you.
I'm not real great at deducing stuff like emotions, etc., from writing. I always got that kind of thing wrong in school. I think because I was raised by wolves. If I had to say what the overall feeling was, I'd have to say I felt fear and longing in the piece.
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