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mmcutter
04-13-2007, 04:14 AM
Hi, newbie here. I admit to having problems with my verbs when there is more than one action being performed in a single sentence. Which is correct, please?



"Never mind him," he growled, struggling to hold onto the rope.

or

"Never mind him," he growled, as he struggled to hold onto the rope.

ErylRavenwell
04-13-2007, 04:19 AM
Both are. :)

a hold on, not a hold onto. Onto implies movement, as in the "The cat jumped onto the table". Struggling to maintain his hold on the rope.

One is a sentence with an apositif; the latter is two complete clauses, linked by a conjunction.

TheIT
04-13-2007, 04:22 AM
Welcome to AW, mmcutter!

Both sound all right to me, too, but should the comma before "as" in the second example be removed?

ErylRavenwell
04-13-2007, 04:36 AM
Welcome to AW, mmcutter!

Both sound all right to me, too, but should the comma before "as" in the second example be removed?

Yes, you can do without.

maestrowork
04-13-2007, 04:38 AM
Both are fine. The comma before "as" is not needed. Also, it's "hold on to" and not "hold onto."

ErylRavenwell
04-13-2007, 05:06 AM
IMO, I think the comma is optional. "He growled" is actually an independent clause to which information is added. If there are two independent clauses, joined by a conjunction, and the first clause is short, then the comma is optional; otherwise the comma is compulsory.

mmcutter
04-14-2007, 03:01 AM
Thanks, everyone, you have been a great help! I appreciate it!

Marge

Carrie in PA
04-14-2007, 05:52 PM
I think they're both technically correct, but the first one sounds better to me. It feels more actiony. :)

Jamesaritchie
04-14-2007, 06:31 PM
Keep the comma.