Sej
Hi all,
In my current wip, I have arrived at a scene between my mage hero (Jadz) and a legendary warrior (Orph). He has the key and she wants it. The whole novel so far is about both of them being manipulated into believing they must have the key. I have set the scene in Orphs home (the indoor setting will severely restrict Jadz use of magic). Orph follows the trail of dead bodies and finds Jadz in his study. The fight starts here but whatever I seem to write, it just does not sound right or seem to fit or sounds very messy. On my first try I made it too long, this I know as I almost fell into a self induced comma when I read it back to myself. On my second try I went for; keep it short and simple and that just felt like “wow I read 10 chapters and she stabbed him that was it!” other attempts just sound messy and I am becoming frustrated that I can’t seem to write a simple one on one fight scene. Going to go back to reading see if I can get some ideas from others will probably dig out my old copy of Dune or something but please if you have any hints or tips on fight scenes please let me know
thanks
Steve
In my current wip, I have arrived at a scene between my mage hero (Jadz) and a legendary warrior (Orph). He has the key and she wants it. The whole novel so far is about both of them being manipulated into believing they must have the key. I have set the scene in Orphs home (the indoor setting will severely restrict Jadz use of magic). Orph follows the trail of dead bodies and finds Jadz in his study. The fight starts here but whatever I seem to write, it just does not sound right or seem to fit or sounds very messy. On my first try I made it too long, this I know as I almost fell into a self induced comma when I read it back to myself. On my second try I went for; keep it short and simple and that just felt like “wow I read 10 chapters and she stabbed him that was it!” other attempts just sound messy and I am becoming frustrated that I can’t seem to write a simple one on one fight scene. Going to go back to reading see if I can get some ideas from others will probably dig out my old copy of Dune or something but please if you have any hints or tips on fight scenes please let me know
thanks
Steve