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Is the bold sentence slipping out of the character's POV?
And the girl who had the medallion. Jezebel wanted that piece of cheap jewelry more than the prince. He frowned and picked at his front teeth. Now why did the witch want it? And where did it come from? He had asked a few people in the kingdom, those who were considered wise. But no one had an answer. It was one of the witch’s secrets.
How about:
He sneered at her and said, "You'll die here."
Or He smiled. She looked lovely wearing the pink dress.
Now all of these are from the speaker's POV. So did I just slip from his POV? Thanks to all.
kim
And the girl who had the medallion. Jezebel wanted that piece of cheap jewelry more than the prince. He frowned and picked at his front teeth. Now why did the witch want it? And where did it come from? He had asked a few people in the kingdom, those who were considered wise. But no one had an answer. It was one of the witch’s secrets.
How about:
He sneered at her and said, "You'll die here."
Or He smiled. She looked lovely wearing the pink dress.
Now all of these are from the speaker's POV. So did I just slip from his POV? Thanks to all.
kim