I just have the problem with the line after hams. I can't think of a way to make it flow better. Tried everything, but maybe I've just been staring at it too long. Another perspective would be gratefully received.
Moeder tugged at the straps of her chemise as she pointed to the swinging hams. Faye stood in the far corner, squinting, trying to lip-read what was being muttered to the ruddy- faced butcher. After only deciphering the words ‘meat’ and ‘off the bone’, she turned her attention back to her melted ice-ream, scooping it between her fingers before it dripped onto the chequered floor below.
Moeder tugged at the straps of her chemise as she pointed to the swinging hams. Faye stood in the far corner, squinting, trying to lip-read what was being muttered to the ruddy- faced butcher. After only deciphering the words ‘meat’ and ‘off the bone’, she turned her attention back to her melted ice-ream, scooping it between her fingers before it dripped onto the chequered floor below.
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