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shaneshotsean
11-02-2004, 06:46 PM
I was told there's no such thing as original sin
i think therefore i doubt i am
i never tried so hard that i hurt myslef
the ace of nothing is the card im dealt

dont try to tell me what i should do
worry about someone else other than you
run gump run and leave me the f***k alone
let me live, let me die in my broken home

last night i was walking down broadstreet
I met llyod banks and he said to me
hey kid why you frontin', gettin s***t for free
whys everyone always picking on me

llyod banks you aint nothin but a kid
a vile parasite sucking off of 50 cent
who i do believe is the product of a mr. eminem
and hey, isnt he dr. dres friend?

so the next time you try to talk to me
on the corner of main and 5th broadstreet
you better have a knife or knuckles of brass
cause son if I see you im gonna kick your ass

rtilryarms
11-03-2004, 06:06 AM
rap
yes

Renee
02-13-2005, 03:37 AM
This is very interesting and casually great!


Cool!

;)

KellyS.
02-16-2005, 04:51 PM
I like it.


I'm not a songwriter by any means, but may I say something about one line?

You have:

dont try to tell me what i should do
worry about someone else other than you
run gump run and leave me the f***k alone
let me live, let me die in my broken home


If the second line is in response to the first line (Which I don't know that it is), could you maybe put: I'll worry about me, you worry about you?
Again, I'm not a songwriter and put me in my place if I'm way off base.:o