Something from the weekend...

Martin Hall-Kenny

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I thought I'd throw my hat into the ring...
I got the idea for this for two reasons...
a) I'm nearing my 51st year (thoughts of my own mortality)
b) What might be the scenario after I'm gone?

The words are here, the music is written and I recorded it yesterday. It is still work in progress as it now needs to be polished.
'Producing a gemstone starts with pulling a rock out of the ground.'

To Jack...

On a bench dedicated to the man that she loved, she remembers the years gone by.
In the park by the river where the birds stop to rest, on the spot where they used to lie.
She remembers the laughter, the hope and the fears,
The dreams of the future, now gone with the years.
She remembers his humour and occasional tears and the far away look in his eyes.
She lives every day, one day at a time; She visits with Jack when she can
And the bench sits alone when she has to go home
In her mind they still walk hand in hand

Her thoughts tumble backward to the day that they met, it was warm with the bluest sky
How they talked while they walked around the paths in the park, together till they said goodbye
Soon they were wed, for true love they had found
He looked so proud, with their friends all around
And each Sunday they'd sit once again on the ground, swearing love till the day they died.
She lives every day, one day at a time; She visits with Jack when she can
And the bench sits alone when she has to go home
In her mind they still walk hand in hand

The house where she loved him now sits empty and cold though she knows she must soon go back
And she still hears the echoes of his voice and she knows that his clothes she must one day pack
Deep in her heart, she is still asking 'why'?
How can she live when her man had to die
And the loneliness seeps out in a tremulous sigh, 'please hold me again, my Jack'
She lives every day, one day at a time; She visits with Jack when she can
And the bench sits alone when she has to go home
In her mind they still walk hand in hand

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She lives every day, one day at a time; She visits with Jack when she can
And the bench sits alone when she has to go home
In her mind they still walk hand in hand

Every Sunday she sits, and she talks while she knits though there's no one around to hear
There's a ghost of a smile upon her lips for a while, its as if he was standing near
She stands to go home for she knows he has gone
The bench bears his name and she knows it won't be long
When hers will be added for that’s where it belongs, her hand wipes away the tears.
She lives every day, one day at a time; She visits with Jack when she can
And the bench sits alone when she has to go home
In her mind they still walk hand in hand
 

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beautiful, martin! very touching indeed!

at times it gets a bit verbose and the meter seems a little off, but if it works with the music... well that only you know... can't wait to hear it!
 

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Excellent, Martin,

A Beautiful detailing of a relationship and the loss when one is gone.

It may seem wordy in the form that it's presented but I doubt it would be in performance. Although long lines are uncommon in Poetry, they should, when set to music, flow freely, and the internal rhyme throughout aids in that, and this is meticulously crafted. I look forward to hearing it.

You obviously practice what you preach. Well Done.

Jim Hoye, (JRH)
 

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I'm at the really difficult stage with this in that I must now start trimming. I performed this 'as is' last night. The whole roudy pub went dead quiet until I finished and then, after a few seconds, cheered! There were as at least three people I could see who were openly crying. It was very moving. The metre works well as I hope you will hear when I get it to the 'posting' stage which should be in a couple of weeks.
 

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Wow... can't wait to hear it!

That's wonderful - more than I could ever hope to achieve :)
 

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It's great stuff Martin! I hope you don't mind me proferring this, but I could almost feel a Paul Simon melancholy wafting along there...have no idea if that was your intention or not but it's very nice...