The Devil's in the Details

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the girl in the store knows just what shes looking for
a real expensive cream that will help unclog her pores
last night her boyfriend said somethin bout her skin
at any other time it would simply make her grin
the devil's in the details, this you all should know
don't critique your girlfriend when she's about to O

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as long as she's laughing, it's quite alright
as long as she's smiling, it doesn't bite
but, close to climax
please, quit those wisecracks
she'll never forgive you that late at night

the girl in the store knows just what shes looking for
a book that will help make her seem less of a bore
last night her boyfriend implied that she was dim
at any other time she'd have simply smiled at him
the devil's in the details, this you all should know
don't critique your girlfriend in the afterglow

If you're only playing, it will be fine
If it's in good cheer, don't change your line
But after a quicky,
don't take the mickey!
when she bursts in tears, that's the warning sign

the girl in the store knows just what shes looking for
an outfit that will help her not look like a whore
last night her boyfriend suggested she looked cheap
any other time she'd have just thought what a creep
the devil's in the details, I would like to say
criticise your girlfriend, but not during foreplay!

Good thing she dumped him, for what he did
the guy never knew when to shut his lid
it's just a shame
that he never explained
he had turrets since he was a kid
 

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Hi. I guess my question would be... is this funny?
 

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Is it supposed to be funny? It runs more along the lines of "odd" for me.
an outfit that will help her not look like a whore
An outfit that will help her to look less like a whore



I think that there were one or two other lines that could've flowed better, but it's hard to tell when you don't know the melody. Also, turretts (from my limited knowledge) causes you to yell random things, not subtly critique your girlfriend's skin/clothes. Just a thought.
 

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haha... so true. I was so off on that ending. all i could come up with now is even worse, though:

he had it coming, for what he did
the guy never knew when to shut his lid
some people said
why'd you cut off his head?
she said I'm not a slut stupid

sorry for sharing that, I just want to prove I'm not giving up on this one yet. Unless noone likes the song and thinks I should... then maybe I will give it up