IM NOT FUNNY WITHOUT YOU

DreamWorks · Dec 4, 2006

This one is more of a satirical anti love song - and not as high a priority as my other song BETTER LEAVE YOU. if you have to choose, that one is more important. but if you have read both feel free to mention either in passing as you crit one to save yourself time. Thank you

I'm not funny without you
Just whiny - no climax.
Without you my jokes
become like what my nan cracks

I miss your good humour
And I've heard a rumour
You feel sick without me
or is it a tumor? Haha

Without you I'm smelly
I've got a potbelly
Well whatdyou expect
All I do is watch telly

Without your love I've nothing to give
Oh yeah, and also - no reason to live
I gaze as my last days pour down the sieve
If you don't forgive me...
I swear you'll soon outlive me

I so wish you hadn't blocked me on skype
I know that for you all my lines are just tripe
You're busy finding someone more like "your type"
Well soon you'll find out - people are hype

Oh how I wish you'd pick up the phone
I'm desperate for a whine and a moan
God it's so boring being alone
Guess I'll have another empty ice cream cone

I know the reason you're not picking up
you're sorry you left but ashamed to own up
Well let me say this - start acting grownup
And technically speaking we never broke up

Oh, please take me back
Give me just one more crack
Come on cut me some slack
We'll make up in the sack [RepeatX2]

mooncars · Dec 4, 2006

DW;
I laughed. I laughed again. Funny stuff. I've never heard a song with the word 'potbelly' in it. Good job.

Rick

DreamWorks · Dec 4, 2006

yay! thnx alot

dont have a tune for this one yet... wasn't sure if i should bother... don't know even what kind of style it would be in. suggestions welcome

moblues · Dec 6, 2006

I liked this, DW. I've never ventured to this section before. Lemme look around a bit.

Mike

jbal · Dec 6, 2006

I like this one the best out of the ones you've posted. More original certainly. Ends well too. Tomorrow I should be able to post a link to a few of my songs, after which you probably won't want my advice any more. heh heh.

DreamWorks · Dec 7, 2006

Jbal I listened to your songs and I still want your advice! Just to let you know I think you're real talented
The sound quality and background music is just great... but anyways thanks for the crit keep'em coming. if you have any specific questions about any of your songs ask. Oh and you never told me who your all time fav musicians are

WildScribe · Dec 7, 2006

DreamWorks said:
I'm not funny without you
Just whiny - no climax.
Without you my jokes
become like what my nan cracks (become lame little wisecracks) <--I had trouble understanding what you were talking about at first

I miss your good humour
And I've heard a rumour
You feel sick without me
or is it a tumor? Haha <----this line doesn't work for me....

Without you I'm smelly
I've got a potbelly
Well what'd you expect
All I do is watch telly

Without your love I've nothing to give
Oh yeah, and also - no reason to live
I gaze as my last days pour down the sieve
If you don't forgive me...
I swear you'll soon outlive me

I so wish you hadn't blocked me on skype
I know that for you all my lines are just tripe
You're busy finding someone more like "your type"
Well soon you'll find out - people are hype

Oh how I wish you'd pick up the phone
I'm desperate for a whine and a moan
God it's so boring being alone
Guess I'll have another empty ice cream cone

I know the reason you're not picking up
you're sorry you left but ashamed to own up
Well let me say this - start acting grownup
And technically speaking we never broke up

Oh, please take me back
Give me just one more crack
Come on cut me some slack
We'll make up in the sack [RepeatX2]

Very funny. Well done.

DreamWorks · Dec 7, 2006

Thank you WildScribe! And since you are a poet I will dedicate my next posting which will be a more poetic song to you...

jbal · Dec 7, 2006

DreamWorks said:
Jbal I listened to your songs and I still want your advice! Just to let you know I think you're real talented
The sound quality and background music is just great... but anyways thanks for the crit keep'em coming. if you have any specific questions about any of your songs ask. Oh and you never told me who your all time fav musicians are

It changes every week. Last few years, maybe Government Mule, Tori Amos, Beck more than anyone maybe, the Beatles, the Roots, Busta Rhymes, Miles Davis, Bob Marley, GWAR, you name it.

WildScribe · Dec 7, 2006

DreamWorks said:
Thank you WildScribe! And since you are a poet I will dedicate my next posting which will be a more poetic song to you...

Welcome, darlin'... glad to help, honestly.

IM NOT FUNNY WITHOUT YOU

DreamWorks

keep dreaming

mooncars

DreamWorks

keep dreaming

moblues

jbal

DreamWorks

keep dreaming

WildScribe

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DreamWorks

keep dreaming

jbal

WildScribe

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