Oh, you guys are awesome
WildScribe, that small correction you made was so desperately needed! My eternal gratitude for that one
I will keep working on this Mike, if you think I can do better so can I! Any specific suggestions on how I could make you love this?? Wait let me shut up and just try on my own...
We never called it love
But I know thats what we were thinking of
Your eyes shone clearer than the skies above
And I know that it was love
I never told you that I care,
I felt it deeply but I didn't dare
A pair of butterflies, we floated through the air,
I didn't speak for fear your wings might tear
I should have known you couldn't stay too long
But as you flew from me you left behind a song
You are my youth you are my truth
The only thing I did that wasn't wrong
* (I wish I could turn back the wheels of time
I'd start my life again from the beginning line
Undo my sins, undo my crimes
But first I'd tell you, you my love, are mine)
We never called it love
But I know thats what we were thinking of
Your eyes shone clearer than the skies above
And I know that it was love
Your soul is sparkling, it is pure, sublime
And it shall stay that way until the end of time
as you arise, into the skies
Remember dear that one time you were mine
* Alternately fourth Verse could be replaced with the 6th and dropped, keeping it as the bookcase structure
Alternately to that the 6th Verse could just be dropped - depending on whether I want to make it a death poem or not... Because I don't think it's a death poem anymore without the new 6th verse