Quick grammar check for sco-fi story

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bluejester12

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The story is in the present tense.


Pieces, soap, rinse. Boom! Hiss. She takes the brown pill, lies down. Sleep comes much faster then usual. The next morning she doesn’t remember what had bothered her yesterday.



Should it be "bothered" or 'had bothered?" I thought the former, but it doesn't sound right.
 
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I think the 'had' is extraneous. Bothered is past tense anyway.
 

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What's a "sco-fi" story? A google shows it has something to do with "sci-fi" and possibly Star Trek.

ETA: This is what I get for drinking Dr. Pepper for breakfast. I am a complete doofus sometimes.
 
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