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This old rhyme wasn't written in French
But it was written on a green bench
Neither yellow nor blue
 

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This old rhyme wasn't written in French
But it was written on a green bench
Neither yellow nor blue
Such a pastoral hue
 

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watcher said:
This rhyme isn't written in French (Is this enough beats?) or is this..

This old rhyme wasn't written in French
But it was written on a green bench


It was right the first time.

Carry on....
 

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Hey, while we're at it, can we fix the number of beats in line 2?? :)
 

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This rhyme wasn't written in French
But it was written on a green bench
Neither yellow nor blue
Such a pastoral hue
For a seat that spring showers would drench.

An ear-splitting scream pierced the air
 

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An ear-splitting scream pierced the air
in the church at the edge of Nowhere
 

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An ear-splitting scream pierced the air
in the church at the edge of Nowhere.
"Not a lim'rick again!"
 

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An ear-splitting scream pierced the air
in the church at the edge of Nowhere.
"Not a lim'rick again!"
Bawled young Darien,
 

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An ear-splitting scream pierced the air
in the church at the edge of Nowhere.
"Not a lim'rick again!"
Bawled young Darien,
"This isn't the Folies Bergères!"

While singing "Addicted to Love"
 

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While singing addicted to love
a lightning bolt shot from above
it struck Robert Palmer
Who dropped on the spot
 

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While singing addicted to love
a lightning bolt shot from above
it struck Robert Palmer
Who dropped on the spot



Aren't the 3rd and 4th lines supposed to rhyme? Or is free verse limerick allowed?

I'd have gone with:

While singing addicted to love
a lightning bolt shot from above
it struck Robert Palmer
with the force of a bomber
 

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pconsidine said:
While singing addicted to love
a lightning bolt shot from above
it struck Robert Palmer
Who dropped on the spot



Aren't the 3rd and 4th lines supposed to rhyme? Or is free verse limerick allowed?

The 4th line is short on syllables as well. Then again, John Lee Hooker made a career out of setting up an expected rhyme, then not rhyming it!

While singing Addicted to Love
a lightning bolt shot from above
it struck Robert Palmer
with the force of a bomber
To the strains of The Smiths' Hand in Glove

My blind date went sadly awry
 

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Yes, limericks have a specified meter and rhyme scheme. I tried to explain all that earlier in the thread. It didn't help my popularity.

My blind date went sadly awry,
I expected a girl, got a guy,
 

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My blind date went sadly awry,
I expected a girl, got a guy.
Not only that, but
 

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My blind date went sadly awry,
I expected a girl, got a guy.
And not only that, but Syllable added for metric reasons
He works as a flatfoot
 

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the syllable isn't missing, it's just felt, not expressed aloud...like a rest in music.

but anyway

My blind date went sadly awry,
I expected a girl, got a guy.
And not only that, but
He works as a flatfoot
Because his is a non-public eye.
 

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Pthom said:

Play nicely, everyone.

From recent posts, it's clear that some people understand the limerick structure better than others. In my opinion, that third line could've worked either way, but the fifth line needs to have a syllable removed. Having said that, I like how it's turned out; very clever. Applause to both the finishers!

So, who's starting the next one?
 

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I left on a two-week vacation
 

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I left on a two-week vacation
to a faraway, warm destination
 

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(Used to be, whoever supplied the fifth line started the next limerick)
 

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I left on a two-week vacation
to a faraway, warm destination
Where no one could phone me
and tell me bologna (you know how to say it properly I hope!)
 
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