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Carisa
07-05-2006, 01:49 AM
Resurrection of veinglory's thread:

What's the last line (or couple of lines) you wrote?

<>Carisa

Carisa
07-05-2006, 01:50 AM
I'll start:

With every ounce of will in her body, she fought to deny this.

davids
07-05-2006, 02:08 AM
It was an a$$ in G-string torque surrounded by frilly shorts.

Carisa
07-05-2006, 02:11 AM
What's a "torque"?

James Buchanan
07-05-2006, 02:36 AM
“If I were a girl, I’d slap you for that comment.”
“If you were a girl, I wouldn’t have f***** you the first time.”

Okay so it's two lines. Shoot me.

Lee_OC
07-05-2006, 02:39 AM
Andy glanced past her and waved. “I hope you don’t mind that I invited a friend.”

James Buchanan
07-05-2006, 02:40 AM
Andy glanced past her and waved. “I hope you don’t mind that I invited a friend.”
BWHAHAHAHHAHAH

davids
07-05-2006, 02:42 AM
It's force that gives a twisting motion.

Sooo it is the last sentence I wrote-no this one is-no this one is-no this one is!

Lee_OC
07-05-2006, 02:53 AM
BWHAHAHAHHAHAH

it's never happened to me. I promise! hehe.

Carisa
07-05-2006, 07:13 AM
"There were pearl beads near the base that rotated as if in a washing machine."

Aren't toys wonderful?
<>Carisa

BarbaraSheridan
07-05-2006, 03:37 PM
I wanna play ^_^

He gasped when something wet touched--no--licked his foot.

Carisa
07-06-2006, 03:12 PM
As her ***** throbbed in the aftermath of the last two orgasms, Mali wondered what all he had in that second drawer.

This time around, this thread is much more erotic. Yea!

<>Carisa

Maryn
07-06-2006, 05:06 PM
“Man... I wish I’d known.”
“I wish you’d told me what you were planning.”

Seems so innocent, doesn't it?

It's not.

Maryn, guilty as charged

James Buchanan
07-06-2006, 05:25 PM
>snerk, innocent... here?<

“Know what, Carol? You read too many of those sappy romance novels.”

Giles English
07-06-2006, 07:39 PM
It's from a script for an erotic graphic novel:

make her thrust. They have a mutual orgasm, but Brigit freaks and leaves the taxi. “I’m not gay” – “Then why the lover in a CB?

Popeyesays
07-06-2006, 07:57 PM
"He was right, I did feel better as Erica. When I finished my half of the stew thickened with acorn flour, I looked fondly about for another rabbit with suicide on his mind, but I had no such luck."

Sorry, but there has to be a story-line stringing all the other stuff together.

Regards,
Scott

Lee_OC
07-06-2006, 08:12 PM
“It was very touch-and-go for a while, but I feel that the worst has passed.” He smiled at her again.



Ok, so *not* erotic...it's a different type of scene obviously.

Maryn
07-06-2006, 10:53 PM
It [a truck] purred to life immediately. I fumbled and found the lights. It slid as smoothly into first gear as my husband had into Gage’s mouth.

Maryn, thinking, 'That's more like it!'

Lee_OC
07-07-2006, 04:31 AM
It [a truck] purred to life immediately. I fumbled and found the lights. It slid as smoothly into first gear as my husband had into Gage’s mouth.

Maryn, thinking, 'That's more like it!'

*fanning face* Good stuff!

Maryn
07-07-2006, 11:48 PM
Why, thank you! It's been so long since I submitted erotica anywhere, or let anyone read it, that I kind of forget that I do have my moments.

I appreciate it in a warm-fuzzy way that the Maryn persona is not at all comfortable with, so don't tell her, okay?

Maryn, much harder than that (get your minds out of the gutter!)

James Buchanan
07-08-2006, 12:32 AM
I refuse to get my mind out of the gutter... it's profitable for me to have it firmly entrenched there.

"Trying to cover his face he felt the wood land hard on his arm and heard the crack as the stick broke."

davids
07-08-2006, 12:39 AM
Steager Yates switched hands and licked at the fingers, stuffed them slowly into his mouth, began to bite, crushing down on them, breaking the skin, bleeding into his mouth.

Maryn
07-08-2006, 05:19 PM
Ooh, davids, I'd surely keep reading!

My latest:

"I've ordered business cards." He eased the truck into traffic. " 'Gage Strickland, F---up.' " He grinned. "Then in smaller lettering, but heavy, 'I'm sorry.' I hope ten thousand is enough."

Maryn who had fun with that line

Carisa
07-08-2006, 06:33 PM
I like that line, Maryn :)

JanDarby
07-08-2006, 08:40 PM
My last line:

The End.

Yep, finally got those elusive last twenty pages done (in draft) and can sort through my other projects to figure out what's next on the agenda to work on for a week until it's time to go back and do the next draft of the just-finished novella, which may end up as a full-fledged novel at this rate.

JD

James Buchanan
07-08-2006, 09:27 PM
congrats on finishing

Lee_OC
07-09-2006, 12:18 AM
Jan - congrats on finishing!

I finished my novella the other night. It's one of the first longer works I've written. Now on to draft #2...

Maryn
07-09-2006, 01:11 AM
Hey, that's great. Kudos to both Jan and Lee.

New last line(s):
“I don’t remember kids. I remember out to dinner,” James said in a thick voice. “Was that tonight?”

“Yes. I love you, Jamie.”

“I remember that.” That grisly smile again, every tooth outlined in blood black under the sodium vapor lights.

Maryn, hoping that by now the reader would prefer he didn't bleed to death