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bluejester12
07-03-2006, 06:40 AM
"One, two, three--" as he counted past ten his hands sprouted more fingers "--thirteen, fourteen."

reph
07-03-2006, 10:11 AM
"One, two, three--" as he counted past ten his hands sprouted more fingers "--thirteen, fourteen."
This is one way, but it doesn't look very good: "One, two, three, . . ."--as he counted past ten, his hands sprouted more fingers--"thirteen, fourteen."

allion
07-03-2006, 10:58 PM
I would go with:

"One, two, three. . ." As he counted past ten, his hands sprouted more fingers. "Thirteen, fourteen."

JMHO,

Karen

reph
07-04-2006, 03:22 AM
I like allion's version. Breaking the quotation into two sentences solves multiple problems.

bluejester12
07-04-2006, 11:08 PM
I like allion's version. Breaking the quotation into two sentences solves multiple problems.

I'll go with that. Except there is one more period after the ellipses, right?

Thanks!

reph
07-04-2006, 11:32 PM
I would have spaced after "three" and used only three periods because the sentence is incomplete. A fourth period would be the one to complete the sentence, and it'd be the first in the series, with no space before it.

Whatever punctuation you use, it might go to an editor who has different preferences and will change it.