I'm looking for 2-3 betas to read my upper Middle Grade linked Science-Fiction short story collection. It is almost 55,000 words.
Here is the blurb:
Twelve-year-old Barney Gile has a secret; he turns into an alligator creature whenever he gets too emotional. Only the inventor he lives with, Mr. Thomas, knows it—and he has a secret of his own, involving his mysterious past.
Unfortunately for Barney, Mr. Thomas’ secret is only revealed once a gun-and-science loving couple starts hunting down Mr. Thomas and him. Now with the help of inventions like a teleporter, an animal translator, and an invisibility machine, Barney is trying to put the couple in jail.
But not all of Barney’s adventures involve the crazy couple. Some of them mean going to different worlds or meeting people who—although he doesn’t realize it at the time—could help Barney stop the couple. People like a clone who thinks he’s a goat and a brave girl that may have a crush on Barney.
Luckily, he has Mr. Thomas to help, but as they go on more and more adventures, Barney realizes something: Mr. Thomas is the closest thing he’s ever had to a friend. Maybe he’s even the father Barney never had, but does Mr. Thomas feel the same way or is Barney just another person he can’t get close to?
Barney and Mr. Thomas is the first collection of three involving Barney and Mr. Thomas. They go on a many physical and emotional adventures throughout the collection.
I need help looking for any problems that may occur in the collection. Be gentle but honest with your critique.
I plan on self-publishing if that helps any.
I can not do a full beta swap, but I will read and critique the first 2,000 words of your book. The only ones I won't read are exotica and historical.
Please PM me if you have any questions or if you are interested. I can either send you the first three stories or you can request the whole thing.
Here is the blurb:
Twelve-year-old Barney Gile has a secret; he turns into an alligator creature whenever he gets too emotional. Only the inventor he lives with, Mr. Thomas, knows it—and he has a secret of his own, involving his mysterious past.
Unfortunately for Barney, Mr. Thomas’ secret is only revealed once a gun-and-science loving couple starts hunting down Mr. Thomas and him. Now with the help of inventions like a teleporter, an animal translator, and an invisibility machine, Barney is trying to put the couple in jail.
But not all of Barney’s adventures involve the crazy couple. Some of them mean going to different worlds or meeting people who—although he doesn’t realize it at the time—could help Barney stop the couple. People like a clone who thinks he’s a goat and a brave girl that may have a crush on Barney.
Luckily, he has Mr. Thomas to help, but as they go on more and more adventures, Barney realizes something: Mr. Thomas is the closest thing he’s ever had to a friend. Maybe he’s even the father Barney never had, but does Mr. Thomas feel the same way or is Barney just another person he can’t get close to?
Barney and Mr. Thomas is the first collection of three involving Barney and Mr. Thomas. They go on a many physical and emotional adventures throughout the collection.
I need help looking for any problems that may occur in the collection. Be gentle but honest with your critique.
I plan on self-publishing if that helps any.
I can not do a full beta swap, but I will read and critique the first 2,000 words of your book. The only ones I won't read are exotica and historical.
Please PM me if you have any questions or if you are interested. I can either send you the first three stories or you can request the whole thing.