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Gregg Bell
02-22-2019, 06:14 AM
These are mock-ups for a child endangerment thriller. It's kind of a tear jerker in that the child dies. But it's also edifying in the end. Nicholas Sparks-ish but not much romance. That sort of thing. Thanks.

#1)
https://i.postimg.cc/Y2D5yxDX/One-Slip1838-X2775-B.jpg

#2)
https://i.postimg.cc/cCvbNVkF/One-Slip1838-X2775-NEWtest.jpg

#3)
https://i.postimg.cc/kXtpYPb4/One-Slip1838-X2775-NEWtestdarker.jpg

#4)
https://i.postimg.cc/13GYP0M1/One-Slip1838-X2775-NEWtestdarkerest.jpg

kevinwaynewilliams
02-22-2019, 09:01 AM
The dark sea does the best at conveying danger. I'd try a little bit of creative masking to get the beach of #2 combined with the water of #4 to heighten the contrast.

The title font is a complete meh for me. Doesn't convey anything thrilling or dangerous.

Earthling
02-22-2019, 12:35 PM
The dark sea does the best at conveying danger. I'd try a little bit of creative masking to get the beach of #2 combined with the water of #4 to heighten the contrast.

The title font is a complete meh for me. Doesn't convey anything thrilling or dangerous.

I agree with all this.

Chris P
02-22-2019, 02:15 PM
My initial gut says 1 or 4, and I agree that the font is not eye-catching. I see what you were trying to do in 3 by hqving the child in grayscale, but I initially completely missed it. Now I think 4 is the strongest.

dpaterso
02-22-2019, 06:30 PM
Man, what a spoiler!

I prefer #1's title because of its gradient, and #4's more menacing darker ocean. And maybe #3's author name especially if it matches the ocean color.

-Derek

Gregg Bell
02-23-2019, 03:12 AM
The dark sea does the best at conveying danger. I'd try a little bit of creative masking to get the beach of #2 combined with the water of #4 to heighten the contrast.

The title font is a complete meh for me. Doesn't convey anything thrilling or dangerous.

Thanks Kevin. I agree this needs the darker water. Any suggestions on the font? Or texturing it?

Gregg Bell
02-23-2019, 03:13 AM
I agree with all this.

Thanks Earthling. I agree with him too.

Gregg Bell
02-23-2019, 03:14 AM
My initial gut says 1 or 4, and I agree that the font is not eye-catching. I see what you were trying to do in 3 by hqving the child in grayscale, but I initially completely missed it. Now I think 4 is the strongest.

Thanks Chris. Not sure what you meant by you almost missed what I was trying to do in #3, though.

Gregg Bell
02-23-2019, 03:16 AM
Man, what a spoiler!

I prefer #1's title because of its gradient, and #4's more menacing darker ocean. And maybe #3's author name especially if it matches the ocean color.

-Derek

Thanks Derek. What's the spoiler, though?

dpaterso
02-23-2019, 02:30 PM
Thanks Derek. What's the spoiler, though?
It's kind of a tear jerker in that the child dies.^^^

-Derek

Crispin
02-28-2019, 03:13 AM
Consider putting the entire image in grayscale and dropping the brightness to better represent the feeling of the book. Right now it feels like it could be about a day at the beach. As for the font, I think a distressed look will be your best bet. Something like this to sell the mood: https://www.fontspace.com/k-type/mailart-rubberstamp

dpaterso
03-01-2019, 01:01 AM
Just a thought, you could also drop the P down a little and angle it as if it's "slipped" -- might make the title a little less ordinary, e.g.

http://mywebcomics.org/temp/one-slip-test.jpg

-Derek

Gregg Bell
03-05-2019, 03:11 AM
^^^

-Derek

Sorry! I never think of stuff like that in the forum!

Gregg Bell
03-05-2019, 03:13 AM
Consider putting the entire image in grayscale and dropping the brightness to better represent the feeling of the book. Right now it feels like it could be about a day at the beach. As for the font, I think a distressed look will be your best bet. Something like this to sell the mood: https://www.fontspace.com/k-type/mailart-rubberstamp

Thanks Crispin. I'm posting new versions of the cover today (with a different image) and one of them has grayscale. Thanks for the link with the font. Very interesting. I'll try it out.

Gregg Bell
03-05-2019, 03:15 AM
Just a thought, you could also drop the P down a little and angle it as if it's "slipped" -- might make the title a little less ordinary, e.g.

http://mywebcomics.org/temp/one-slip-test.jpg

-Derek

Thanks Derek. You did a really awesome job on that. And without the source file. Impressive. I think I'm going to go with a different image though. I'm going to post right after this.