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So I'm trying to write a scene where the MC hears voices (presumably in her head) and she addresses them in her head. It's kind of a weird thing, and I'm not entirely sure if I'm writing this correctly. Here are the two sentences:
Whispers, like a buzzing in my ear, repeat, too pale, too pale.
Go away, I tell the voices in my head. It’s no use they never listen.
What do you all think? How would you write it?
Thanks so much!
Courtney
Whispers, like a buzzing in my ear, repeat, too pale, too pale.
Go away, I tell the voices in my head. It’s no use they never listen.
What do you all think? How would you write it?
Thanks so much!
Courtney