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Okay, it's time to practice your description skills. You are to describe yourself as random people passing by see you, or as someone who knows nothing about you sees you. Let's see how well you know yourself. Remember, this should be pure description. I start:
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When they told me she was the brainiest girl in the class, I half-expected her to be a nerd wearing thick glasses and sitting quietly at the library. I can't really tell if she's a disappointment of a pleasant surprise.
I first see her walking towards her friends. It's funny, she zigzags from one side to the other and flails her arms around, leaning dangerously to the right like a drunk. She is not exactly short, but as she reaches her friends I realize she barely reaches their shoulders. She looks like a midget, and a jumpy one at that. She just can't seem to sit still, jumping on top of the tables, bouncing on the chairs, arguing with the tallest of her friends about nothing in particular.
It is her eyes that captivate me the most, though. They are a bright shade of honey, almost yellow. She turns to look at another friend who calls her name, and her eyes catch the sun, turning a beautiful olive green color.
She yells something at her friend, an answer about the upcoming exam. She stutters slightly as she talks, mixing the english terms we've studied in class with the spanish words she speaks, sounding like a gringo who hasn't quite grasped the spanish language. Her friends laugh at her for that. She reaches towards the closest friend and punches him playfully on the chest, but with enough strenght to make him stop laughing.
Her eyes fall on me, and she smiles. Her smile makes her blush, a deep red blush interrupted only by deep dimples on either side of her mouth. She has a wild, unkempt beauty that captivates me. Everything from her worn-out military trousers to her gray sweater, which is almost four sizes too big, to her wild curly hair barely contained with a rubber band look beautiful and original in her. Her smile invites me to come closer, which I do with timid steps. Her huge friends intimidate me, although nothing about them seems to be alarming. I guess it's their size, and the fact that they look much taller when standing next to her.
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This is my first try at first person present, lol. Does it show?
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When they told me she was the brainiest girl in the class, I half-expected her to be a nerd wearing thick glasses and sitting quietly at the library. I can't really tell if she's a disappointment of a pleasant surprise.
I first see her walking towards her friends. It's funny, she zigzags from one side to the other and flails her arms around, leaning dangerously to the right like a drunk. She is not exactly short, but as she reaches her friends I realize she barely reaches their shoulders. She looks like a midget, and a jumpy one at that. She just can't seem to sit still, jumping on top of the tables, bouncing on the chairs, arguing with the tallest of her friends about nothing in particular.
It is her eyes that captivate me the most, though. They are a bright shade of honey, almost yellow. She turns to look at another friend who calls her name, and her eyes catch the sun, turning a beautiful olive green color.
She yells something at her friend, an answer about the upcoming exam. She stutters slightly as she talks, mixing the english terms we've studied in class with the spanish words she speaks, sounding like a gringo who hasn't quite grasped the spanish language. Her friends laugh at her for that. She reaches towards the closest friend and punches him playfully on the chest, but with enough strenght to make him stop laughing.
Her eyes fall on me, and she smiles. Her smile makes her blush, a deep red blush interrupted only by deep dimples on either side of her mouth. She has a wild, unkempt beauty that captivates me. Everything from her worn-out military trousers to her gray sweater, which is almost four sizes too big, to her wild curly hair barely contained with a rubber band look beautiful and original in her. Her smile invites me to come closer, which I do with timid steps. Her huge friends intimidate me, although nothing about them seems to be alarming. I guess it's their size, and the fact that they look much taller when standing next to her.
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This is my first try at first person present, lol. Does it show?