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Cascada
02-28-2017, 12:01 PM
Hello there,

I've not done this before (though I have attempted - in my infancy as a beta-reader - to help others) but I need some feedback, particularly initially, on the beginning. I'm not certain if I begin too early or too late in the story, but it requires reading the first three chapters to ascertain this.

I'm still deciding whether this is YA or not, but it is a science fiction novel. The kind with cyborgs, rebels, ships, strange weapons, and a dose of dystopia (but it takes place on earth).

I'm happy to partner up as a fellow beta too, and give feedback as well on your writing, but a seasoned beta reader or two would be appreciated as well.

Thank you.

Denevius
02-28-2017, 12:31 PM
Hello Cascada,

If you would be interested in reading my short story, which is horror at 7500 words, I will read up to 12,000 words of your novel. I will copy and paste the first 200 words below, and you can email me at eniac_caine@hotmail.com.

Thanks!

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Goyangi Soju

George ducked to avoid the intricate webs in the bus stop canopy above his balding head. More than once hed been startled by eight hairy legs tickling his scalp as he waited for the local transfer bus heading into the outskirts of Suncheon city. He eased down onto the low wooden bench, his damaged knees protesting every inch, and he sighed with relief to be off his feet. As he slipped his shoulder bag off to place beside him, high-pitched wails clawed through the silence and ratcheted his heart up to a rapid-fire tattoo.

George leapt up and glanced over his shoulder into the woods where the cries floated up above the trees. The sudden movement sent jagged shocks of pain down the base of his neck, and tears filled his eyes. Struggling to control his breathing, George gritted his teeth and tamped down the adrenaline filling his body. He looked both ways down the narrow lane running past the bus stop to see if anyone lingered nearby.

No one. He stood alone.

The cries died off after several seconds, and silence surrounded him like a clenched fist.

Cascada
02-28-2017, 12:43 PM
Thank you Denevius, have emailed. Will gladly read your story :)