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Need Beta: PB, 568 words

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Lucid

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It's a short read!

I really need a beta because I have a tendency to add a lot of extra commas. Outside of that it shouldn't be much work as I'm generally a good speller/typist/etc.
Though I'd also welcome opinions, having never written a picture book before. There are a couple things in the middle I'm not sure about, and also not sure I like the last line.
 
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