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Cassie88
04-28-2006, 09:46 PM
I'm reading "The Poetry Home Repair Manual," by Ted Kooser.

"The poem is the device through which the ordinary world is seen in a new way."

Example in the book:

Aritichoke - by Joseph Hutchinson

O heart weighed down by so many wings

Just something to keep us observant.
They don't have to be one line, but for this thread, let's opt for shorter, not longer, however, if one observation leads to a longer piece, go for it.

My observation today -

Little Lamp

Little lamp lights up when touched

Paint
04-28-2006, 09:57 PM
a breeze-
whispering message from God

like that Cassie?

Cassie88
04-28-2006, 10:15 PM
Yeah, Paint!


The grandfather clock,
Obsessed with time.

ddgryphon
04-28-2006, 11:00 PM
The bed a sluggish layabout

Cassie88
04-29-2006, 01:41 AM
A small, white, loyal towel,
giving all of its fibers to
ketchup dribbled on chin,
tears dribbled on cheek.

kdnxdr
04-29-2006, 04:01 AM
coffee mug,
odin of my computer desk,
you leave your mark
on my life

Bret
04-29-2006, 06:52 AM
Yo Cassie! Everyone should read that book! I loved that book. It helped me over a major problem I'd been having.

The artichoke poem? I would imagine anyone who wrote such a thing would die satisfied. What a great piece.


The end of the Sparkler. Below the orange glow, the wire curves into darkness...

Cassie88
04-29-2006, 09:19 AM
The candle,
Dies only when it gives,
Dies only when it lives.

Paint
04-29-2006, 05:47 PM
the computer
friendly little orb
small in appearance
massive in reality

Cassie88
04-29-2006, 09:49 PM
The picture in my bedroom
is a mirror the sailboats
and lighthouse, the sea,
and the cottages,
look into,
too enthralled by
their own beauty to move.

smalleststar
04-29-2006, 09:51 PM
EGG

Perfectly designed,
By a stupid chicken.

smalleststar
04-30-2006, 01:04 AM
Toys

One day you knew to call them toys.
'My toys', you said. It made me sad.
I thought you still believed them to be real.

kdnxdr
04-30-2006, 01:45 AM
books are gates,
portals to another plane
in parallel dimensions

rich
04-30-2006, 01:50 AM
A spider web, a nuisance to us, a world to a spider.

Cassie88
04-30-2006, 02:33 AM
Vacuum Cleaner

All dressed up in a shiny, smart yellow and gray suit,
Silently dripping distain on my dirty carpet,
My vacuum cleaner thinks I've married her son.
If I had, we'd be divorcing.

kdnxdr
04-30-2006, 05:23 AM
toilet,
equilizer of all
humility in a bowl
cleanses the soul
seat of contemplation

Cassie88
04-30-2006, 05:30 AM
toilet,
equilizer of all
humility in a bowl
cleanses the soul
seat of contemplation

Humility in a bowl

Priceless!

poetinahat
05-01-2006, 06:41 AM
condom:
a Dorian Gray bodybag
a pliant cloak
through which we touch
without leaving a scar

Bret
05-01-2006, 07:18 AM
Holy smoke hat man! *wiping away tears* A Dorian Gray condom? Ha ha. It will never age!

I'm trying to picture this... then again I'm trying not to.:)

Cassie88
05-01-2006, 07:38 AM
I'm giving my washing machine
a rest. I can't find the cut,
but something got hurt,
bad, blood everywhere.

poetinahat
05-01-2006, 10:25 AM
babies and old folks
all look the same
by nature

the rest of us
whether we mean it or not
achieve the same effect
by artifice

Ted
05-01-2006, 07:31 PM
A border collie,

a game,
running obsessively around,
trying to find players!

Cassie88
05-03-2006, 12:40 AM
Paperclip

I find the mangled paperclip
in a junk drawer,
and attempt
to bend it back
to its simple purpose,
cursing myself
for once asking it
to change.
Slipping it over
a small stack of papers,
I see I am forgiven,
this time.

ddgryphon
05-03-2006, 01:18 AM
The eye that is beheld
spewing everything
without reason
without discrimination
filling us with purposelessness
Television

poetinahat
05-03-2006, 10:42 AM
You must remember me
Every one of me
Then you must deny me
And remember me again

password

Cassie88
05-04-2006, 08:47 AM
Inheriting Big Bucks

When he was struggling,
he bought new cars;
now that he's loaded,
he's decided it's stupid
to buy new cars.

I guess you have
to interit a big bundle
to understand how
you can be a big spender
when poor, and a poor
spender, when rich.

poetinahat
05-08-2006, 12:22 PM
Man,
Do this forever:
Not contemplate
The thing
That makes you
Man.

Cassie88
05-09-2006, 01:36 AM
The ball point pen

For three days,
I have shaken you.
For three days,
You responded,
living till the very last drop.
It's time to let you go.

Bret
05-09-2006, 02:30 AM
Thumb.
Stubby straw boss of the finger posse.
The squat emperor of the opposition.

mkcbunny
05-09-2006, 08:57 AM
Man, these are great. I particularly liked the towel and the password.

A. Hamilton
05-09-2006, 09:04 AM
a tear
carries my hurt
in her salt
a rush of them
leaves me dry

Bret
05-09-2006, 05:23 PM
Eraser: Dull but determined. Nose to the grindstone.

NeuroFizz
05-09-2006, 07:27 PM
Eyes are seen
as much as
they see

NeuroFizz
05-09-2006, 07:35 PM
Avoided by the very tires
that birth them.



What are they?

ddgryphon
05-09-2006, 08:20 PM
Oasis of tranquility
enhancing my ability
to cope in every way
with the pressures of my day

Cassie88
05-09-2006, 08:51 PM
Electricity Out -

It's just me and me,
and we haven't been
getting along these days.

A. Hamilton
05-09-2006, 09:06 PM
Avoided by the very tires
that birth them.



What are they?
potholes?
grrrr

Cassie88
05-11-2006, 11:24 PM
The Scratch-Off

She places the ticket
on the hood of her car
and scratches.
I wait until I get home,
stretching the hope,
feeding the fantasy.
And I need
a comfortable chair
to absorb the truth of
nothing's going to change,
at least, not today.

poetinahat
05-12-2006, 05:01 PM
smoke draws
through a filter
papered to resemble cork
Cork?
the spent tube
flicked from a passing boat
bobs in the lake

rich
05-12-2006, 05:04 PM
Ah, Thanksgiving--when one species ceases to gobble and another begins.

Cassie88
05-12-2006, 08:21 PM
Insight

...when my brain and heart join voices and yell to me, "HELLO!"

NeuroFizz
05-12-2006, 08:26 PM
One card, please
to draw to
the inside straight

of your heart

Bret
05-13-2006, 06:55 PM
Cemetery monuments
look a lot like chess pieces-
is it your move?

rich
05-13-2006, 07:16 PM
The dinosaur left
before we came--for once, we
have an alibi

Bret
05-13-2006, 07:34 PM
a man with a gun
is just an elevator operator
going down?

DeniseK
05-13-2006, 07:38 PM
Does my sassiness upset you?
Why are you beset with gloom?
'Cause I walk like I've got oil wells
Pumping in my living room.

Bret
05-13-2006, 10:41 PM
Door hinge: You are doubled over on your own irony.

A. Hamilton
05-17-2006, 11:19 PM
gaudy
noisy
jewels dangle
from ears that
never listen

rich
05-17-2006, 11:27 PM
Hmm, these are getting better and better.

I weeded a weed today. Hope it's essence will not save mankind sometime later. No, that's not what I meant.

NeuroFizz
05-17-2006, 11:52 PM
This ring now
constricts bloodflow
to a fingertip
that no longer
touches you

rich
05-18-2006, 12:00 AM
A different take, a different format.


I weeded a weed
Later, it may service us
We still just make due.

A. Hamilton
05-18-2006, 12:01 AM
flashy
bands of manís best treasures
cuff flying hands that
compel me
dismiss me

A. Hamilton
05-18-2006, 12:03 AM
A different take, a different format.


I weeded a weed
Later, it may service us
We still just make due.

i trashed a weed
later,
it trashed me

rich
05-18-2006, 12:11 AM
Good stuff, girl.

(how dare you! ummph)

A. Hamilton
05-18-2006, 01:01 AM
red is gold but gold is better
share the wealth

NeuroFizz
05-18-2006, 01:13 AM
a pointing finger
draws attention
both from and to
the pointer

Stew21
05-18-2006, 01:57 AM
lending intentions.
watching
raindrops racing.
as they fall
I feel better
knowing
sometimes
we all lose.


Cassie: I got your rp. thanks. I'm glad you like this. I contemplated what you said about making a longer version of this, and as I think about other images and things that I would add, words that would emphasize the feeling here, I spin myself in circles and it folds in on top of my brain. I haven't grasped (yet!) how I would add to it, but it is an interesting idea. I will give it a shot when I can put together some images that help it out. THANKS for reading and for the suggestion.

Deleo In Graviditas
05-18-2006, 04:01 AM
Rubber and latex (not what one would think),
Twisted and looped over and over and over
To snare tight a [placename] facelift;
Restriction's friction unto follicular damage.

Bret
05-18-2006, 09:09 AM
Antique dresser

Your middle drawer is open mouthed
in the center of your solid oak expression.

Cassie88
05-18-2006, 09:49 PM
Regrets

the bud vase I accidently knocked off the shelf,
a small regret

the vase of red roses I shattered against the inside of my skull,
the real thing

drachin8
05-18-2006, 10:10 PM
the homeless:
all dressed up;
nowhere to go.


wedding ring:
bound in gold,
but bound nonetheless.


keepsake:
for your sake
or for mine?



This is fun. :)

-Michelle

poetinahat
05-19-2006, 11:01 AM
a dropped note
jars for an instant
but
play on
and the ear will remember it

ddgryphon
05-19-2006, 06:49 PM
Soul of sound
wood and ivory
where my heart plays out

NeuroFizz
05-19-2006, 06:57 PM
encircling sounds defy
the linearity
of the keys

Bret
05-19-2006, 08:35 PM
Margin of terror

The width of the whiteness surrounding an eye

Cassie88
05-19-2006, 11:14 PM
Piano III

Silent reminder of lost opporTUNities

Bret
05-20-2006, 02:13 AM
Assumption

there was
a beautiful woman
in the next seat

i ignored her
so people would think
we were together

Paint
05-21-2006, 01:46 AM
Latex gloves
disease out
until the needle-

Bret
05-21-2006, 02:28 AM
Wanton! Wanton!

For this very reason
our hearts are condemned
to live out their days
in cages made of bone

Beyondian
05-21-2006, 06:46 AM
Writer's pen and paper,
linking hand to thoughts and then... Beyond.

Bret
05-21-2006, 08:34 PM
Keepsakes:
Dragging out my iron box
filled with sticks and stones
and, to tell you the truth,
some fairly painful names.

Shane
05-22-2006, 12:21 AM
Coffee:
Stealing the dreams of restful sleep
A Sleepless hour in each spoon.

Cassie88
05-22-2006, 04:50 AM
Home Run

All of our hopes hang on to a ball fying through the air.

poetinahat
05-22-2006, 06:00 AM
That cruel mirror
flares my nose
huge, comical and ugly
then turns in my hand
to offer a soft mound of sugar

NeuroFizz
05-22-2006, 08:30 PM
Does the pincushion
deserve it?

Cassie88
05-22-2006, 09:32 PM
Does the pincushion
deserve it?

:roll:

Cassie88
05-22-2006, 09:36 PM
Thimble

Helmet for a thumb

Bret
05-24-2006, 12:16 AM
The blind man’s cane:

A beam of white light probes
The darkness of noonday

Ted
05-24-2006, 12:43 AM
WOW!

shilonie
07-03-2006, 02:59 AM
Finger...
Pulls a trigger
pushes a button

wipes blood from a wound
rubs in the healing balm

is pricked--
is missing

ragged nails
chopped

long sexy
red tips

touching lips...

Kida Adelyne
07-04-2006, 11:53 PM
Scrambled Eggs


It started as an omelette
and turned into a massacre

Stew21
07-06-2006, 10:13 PM
Whisper

a whisper is the secret's way
of sneaking out of the house
to see the world and meet new people
only to be caught while trying to get
back in through an open window.

Bret
07-17-2006, 04:55 PM
Gossip:
Her toungue is a matchead
strike anywhere

poetinahat
07-17-2006, 06:02 PM
memory never suffices:
we still
play records
when we know the tunes.

Bret
07-26-2006, 05:13 PM
am i afraid
to make love to a woman
who raises miniature horses
and stables them
in a jewelry box?

Bret
07-26-2006, 05:15 PM
a saxophone
is a big enough hook
to catch a golden whale

Bret
07-26-2006, 05:15 PM
Magnolia trees
pretend they have ensorceled
a magician's flock of birds

poetinahat
07-27-2006, 03:06 AM
a thick rind
makes no promise
of a fine cheese

NeuroFizz
07-27-2006, 04:26 PM
Love is difficult for one
who can't figure out
how to find sweetness
by thumping a watermelon

Bret
07-28-2006, 07:06 AM
neuro, you may be on to something. But you are going to annoy a hell of a lot of women with your thump a melon search.

But yeah, it makes sense. The right girl should have a ripe distinctive tone.

NeuroFizz
07-28-2006, 04:21 PM
I worried about that, but I stayed with it for three reasons. The intent was to indicate that anyone who is a poor judge of character could have difficulty in this area, although there is a whole slew of other interpretations. Second, it's written in a gender-independent way (even though it is written by a man). Third, the important phrase is not "thumping a melon" but "finding sweetness by thumping a melon." There is a difference. This comes from my total inability to pick out ripe watermelon with the thump method.

If anyone finds it offensive, I'll remove it immediately. william, if you want to remove it for this reason, feel free. It's an interesting aspect of writing poetry--worrying about strumming the wrong string.

I think people who know me understand that my stance on domestic violence is one of zero tolerance.

Note: I've changed it to "thumping a watermelon" to get to my original intent. Don't know why I didn't do that in the first place.

Bret
07-28-2006, 05:20 PM
No No Neuro! Its funny as can be! I was trying to picture a man "shopping" for the perfect woman by giving her a light tap on the ribs! If it works,
E-Harmony is out of biz! I can't see anyone making a connection between this and violence.

Though if you were to actually try this method, there would likely be some...shortly after you "checked" their sugar content, many of them would haul off and punch you in the face, pepper spray you, grind a heel into your shin, you know- all the usual pre first date stuff.

Except for "Mrs Right" of course. She'll respond with a sweet smile, drop kick you unconcious, throw you over her shoulder and take you home. :)

ddgryphon
07-28-2006, 08:11 PM
I would be careful of who's melons I thumped, and where I thumped them, if I were you.

Bret
07-28-2006, 11:32 PM
They look carefree, but the fear of failure
weighs down the heart of every skipping stone

Bret
07-29-2006, 03:05 AM
amber.
are you really ancient sunlight
seen through a dewdrop
on a now extinct leaf?

Bret
07-29-2006, 03:06 AM
stoplight:
Queen Isabella's ruby
has swallowed a candle!

Bret
07-29-2006, 03:06 AM
brick red:
for long enough
you've borne the weight

ddgryphon
07-29-2006, 03:35 AM
Zen Garden

Stone and sand
by my hand
settle near
serene here

poetinahat
08-01-2006, 03:58 PM
I, the fourth table leg
add symmetry
but not balance

DeborahM
08-01-2006, 04:10 PM
One believes it is the wind
that sways the field of wheat
when in fact it is the hand of God
aerating the field for growth
and a thing of beauty
to the eye of the beholder

NeuroFizz
08-01-2006, 04:51 PM
Do shoelaces always
have to be tied?

colpo di fulmine
08-02-2006, 12:01 AM
a vertigo of steep forest floors rising obliquely from
sands
in helical down-drafts,
a web of soft-fire emerald pinions

-John NÚto

NeuroFizz
08-02-2006, 12:06 AM
If the paths most
worth traveling
require machetes,
why do most people
look for footprints?

maestrowork
08-02-2006, 12:10 AM
Paper cuts deeper than words, sometimes

Bret
08-02-2006, 05:09 PM
Insole:
Has my running shoe spoken with
the Shroud of Turin?

NeuroFizz
08-02-2006, 05:13 PM
Nice, Bret. It's funny how interesting imprints can look.

By the way, I thought of the Shroud of tourin' for running shoes. I know, corny.

Bret
08-03-2006, 04:03 AM
stand in any line
they're all to the same event
ultimately

poetinahat
08-03-2006, 04:07 AM
a face burns red with shame
but its shadow is still grey

Bret
08-03-2006, 04:12 AM
corn goes well with shoe humour neuro ;)

LimeyDawg
08-03-2006, 04:24 AM
I like this from the Leigh Hunt classic-

Say I'm weary, say I'm sad,
Say that health and welth have miss'd me,
Say I'm growing old, but add,
Jenny kiss'd me

LimeyDawg
08-03-2006, 04:29 AM
Another favorite of mine is from Neruda's The Saddest Poem
To hear the immense night, more immense without her.
And the poem falls to the soul as dew to grass.

LimeyDawg
08-03-2006, 04:33 AM
This comes from my total inability to pick out ripe watermelon with the thump method.


Neuro, that's because you can't tell if a melon's ripe by thumping...

drachin8
08-06-2006, 10:23 PM
melons:
violence
gives you no answers

kdnxdr
08-06-2006, 10:28 PM
This is one of my favorites, author unknown to me:

politics:
many
blood suckers

kdnxdr
08-06-2006, 10:30 PM
love,
that which we
are known by
yet
seems unknown
by most

kdnxdr
08-06-2006, 10:33 PM
vehicle of escape,
mechanical world
driven by destinies
out of control,
sexual icon: car

ddgryphon
08-07-2006, 01:44 AM
it disturbs
me
on mornings when
my
espresso machine
speaks French before making anything

*********************************

il me
dérange
des matins où mon machine
d'espresso parle
français avant
de faire n'importe
quoi

Bret
08-11-2006, 03:38 AM
Crows: Two's company. Three's a murder.

ricahardo
08-11-2006, 08:19 AM
Recycling - good exercise even for couch potatoes.

maestrowork
08-11-2006, 09:45 AM
There is no
Egg
in
Eggplant

Bret
08-12-2006, 08:13 PM
Forgetting-
The pink stub of dawn erases last night's dream

kdnxdr
08-12-2006, 11:31 PM
angst,
agony
as it dribbles out of me

poetinahat
09-06-2006, 06:21 PM
When David slew Goliath
children danced among the bones
but elders spoke with reverence
and troubled overtones

For what the older tribesmen knew
the young had yet to see:
a boy made hero in a day
will turn to monarchy.

ricahardo
09-06-2006, 08:00 PM
Very nice Poetinahat. This one is for Neurofizz:

I've seen the footprints
that tell me where I've been,
but where are those
that tell me where to go?

NeuroFizz
09-06-2006, 09:10 PM
Cactus thorns (from shed segments of a "jumping cactus")

I hitch hiker's thumb
you can't refuse.

poetinahat
09-08-2006, 11:54 AM
my parents won't pay for college
because
when I was a kid
I preferred the bottom bunk.

moneyonthepage
09-09-2006, 02:30 AM
i trashed a weed
later,
it trashed me

Bravo!

moneyonthepage
09-09-2006, 02:46 AM
melons:
violence
gives you no answers


:roll:

moneyonthepage
09-09-2006, 02:55 AM
bottles:
dispense mother's milk
white and amber form
cradle love liquids
throats forlorn

ddgryphon
09-09-2006, 06:04 AM
Whiskey
not just for breakfast
anymore

drachin8
09-09-2006, 06:16 PM
pink slip:
beautiful in the mirror,
baleful on the desk.

poetinahat
09-10-2006, 06:31 PM
the lawns of graveyards
are greener and more lush
than playground fields

but which will have
the sweetest apples?

NeuroFizz
09-11-2006, 05:09 PM
the lawns of graveyards
are greener and more lush
than playground fields

but which will have
the sweetest apples?
and which will have the worms?

A. Hamilton
11-07-2006, 09:32 AM
True Friend

Daily
I hand my worries to you
like a coat check.
You always lose the claim tag.

Bret
11-07-2006, 06:12 PM
"I Candy!" said the boss' new wife.

kdnxdr
12-17-2006, 08:52 PM
alphabet:

individual sounds of a community
with harmonious intent

dancingandflying
12-31-2006, 08:17 AM
stairs

fragile wood
dusty
where the floor meets the wall
everyone pounds their
muddy
shoes
on you.

Alice.

Billytwice
01-01-2007, 11:47 PM
Tobacco smoke:
Satan's whispered curse disguised as an angel's breath.

kdnxdr
01-23-2007, 07:01 AM
grey hair:

life's trophies
earned
and proudly
flown like flags
herald
wisdom's presence

kdnxdr
01-23-2007, 07:04 AM
wrinkles:

thought creases
map your journey
up steep hills
and into
valleys
where no one has
gone
save you

Cassie88
03-17-2007, 07:02 AM
Out of the hail
Into the garage

I swear I hear
my car sigh

before going to sleep

dobiwon
03-22-2007, 10:06 PM
Foolish Father?

Although you probably thought I did it out of a sense of obligation
That I was being foolish
That it was useless
I always loved waiting up for you.

Albedo of Zero
03-23-2007, 04:40 AM
Motorbird on high
life, predator for sport
massaging, kneading, muscled pads
nine lives are way too short
goddess in a true fur coat
that's scoured tongue and teeth
dainty footfalls, knowing looks
encircled in a wreath

threedogpeople
04-06-2007, 04:07 AM
the doorbell chimes
the dog-bells answer
repeatedly

ddgryphon
04-06-2007, 09:04 AM
The flipping dogs
barking wildly at
nothing
force me to seek
deeper comfort in my
pillow

poetinahat
05-30-2007, 06:01 AM
where
Nothing
is taught
Anything
can be
learned.

Writer???
05-30-2007, 10:15 PM
Refrigerator
Cool container of plans, dreams, life--
And death...

threedogpeople
05-31-2007, 06:51 AM
ceiling fans
gently blowing away
sunshine's hot kiss

Ultra
05-31-2007, 07:23 AM
From Michael McFee's book of one-line poems:

A Sheet of Paper

Blank mirror I've broken a million times



http://bullcitypress.com/smallesttalk.php

NeuroFizz
05-31-2007, 05:04 PM
What laws do you break
when you take
from me more
than you give?

Them all.

ddgryphon
05-31-2007, 05:44 PM
When you said,
"I love you,"
I thought you meant
forever,
not just a little while.

threedogpeople
05-31-2007, 05:44 PM
breathless air
sitting motionless
above
glass smooth water

threedogpeople
06-05-2007, 06:10 AM
misted mountains
silently absorbing
moisture too tiny
to be rain

bright green
grasses and trees
filtered soft by
evening's light

salty surge
relentlessly covering
trillions of grains
of dark gray sand

murky marsh
patiently waiting
thirsting for
promised moisture

eagle eagerly
keeps watch
seeking an
opportune moment

poetinahat
07-04-2007, 04:21 PM
Revolution:
What you get
for spare
change

A. Hamilton
07-04-2007, 08:10 PM
This was from another prompt here, but I thought it fit as well in this thread.


I am from tomorrow
where time drips like
wet cotton on the line

My hands work relentlessly
wringing, wringing

NeuroFizz
07-07-2007, 10:19 AM
This one comes from Mrs. Fizzy:

Find constraint
in the pages
of the humbling
past

threedogpeople
07-17-2007, 12:58 PM
Husband
stoically
preparing
to do battle
in the name
of love.

kdnxdr
07-19-2007, 05:48 AM
lucrative opportunity
or once again,
a lost can of pop?

is it better
to have played
and lost,
or to never play
at all?

(the one dollar lottery ticket)

alanna
07-20-2007, 10:05 PM
One white pigeon on the fountain where the homeless go at noon.

poetinahat
07-25-2007, 09:41 AM
Home from her quest
for the Naked Truth
she found her lover
was only
one of the two.

threedogpeople
09-02-2007, 10:50 AM
beloved softly snoring
in work deep sleep

threedogpeople
09-16-2007, 11:34 PM
How do you say goodbye,
to someone
(or something)
that has spent
their whole life
giving joy?

Dog life
winding down
like a worn
o u t

clock.

Writer???
09-17-2007, 03:47 AM
Razor blade; so sharp the focus of your use.

Writer???
09-17-2007, 03:51 AM
Digital murdered the moment trapped in time.

poetinahat
09-25-2007, 10:36 AM
they break
up
and break
down

he sits
up
she sits
down

they
collapse
and relapse
lap on lap

poetinahat
10-02-2007, 03:56 AM
she
told him she
needed more
space

he
flinched
smiled
and stepped
out of the
closet

Writer???
10-11-2007, 07:41 AM
Technology grows
Brings world closer together
Keeps people apart
Paradox

CurtisPutnam
10-20-2007, 08:59 AM
Half of Zero
never enough.

Writer???
10-21-2007, 08:56 AM
The weight of the universe
pressing it down
yet the sea rages on

ddgryphon
10-23-2007, 11:39 AM
Morning is the soul's revenge
against the body's transgressions.

Writer???
10-25-2007, 08:17 AM
Refreshing, enlivening,
such improvement,
so little appreciation.

Remembered
only when needed,
thought of (if at all)
as mere convenience.

It waits to give its life
for other's pleasure, comfort,
enjoyment and entertainment.

little ice cube in the freezer.

threedogpeople
10-25-2007, 04:31 PM
How many
breaths
does my
old girl
have left?

CurtisPutnam
10-27-2007, 05:03 AM
How much weight
Does paper add to ink.

threedogpeople
11-19-2007, 11:02 AM
silken, soft fur
delicate breath
nuzzles on my shoulder
sharing moments
as life winds down

treasured instants
velvety in the mist
of dawn's light
cuddles as gentle
as newborn skin

my heart fills with
the pleasure of love;
a moment
to be reverently
visited for the rest
of my life
and
for the rest of hers

Nyna
11-21-2007, 09:16 AM
Apollo’s clipped toenail
left a moon
in the afternoon sky.

dancingandflying
11-24-2007, 05:09 AM
fingers

smell like bleach
and the pool with
torn nails
with frayed edges.
move like spiders in the dark.

peace out. :D

threedogpeople
11-29-2007, 12:12 PM
empty dish
empty bed
empty collar
empty leash

aching hearts

overflowing eyes

poetinahat
11-29-2007, 02:22 PM
this is
the least i can do

Worst 'poem' ever.

================

Bully's Redemption

I nipped unopened
the inchoate
bloom
of a closed
rosebud

I rolled it
in the heat
of my
fingers
to reveal
a crushed
aphid
and the black-rimmed
hole
in the folded white
flower flesh

I wipe clean my
hand
on my
pants

and forgive myself

Unique
12-03-2007, 11:51 AM
Love like fate
shows no mercy
It takes what it will
and leaves
behind the memories
Love cuts like a blade
til the scars weep no more.

Unique
12-06-2007, 04:57 AM
I nearly gave my brain a fit
The studying of British lit

Perhaps I haven't got it yet
This Montague and Capulet.


:p

Cassie88
02-05-2008, 01:32 AM
A bottle of Palmes d'or
Another reason
To hate being poor

poetinahat
03-07-2008, 03:26 AM
cattle ranchers
have an unwritten rule:
when you pass through a gate,
leave it
open or closed
as you found it

in the serene living dark
of bedrooms and sleepers
father learns this rule
price of tuition:
one marble-sized welt
on his forehead
and one annoyed
but mercifully groggy
spouse

Cassie88
03-07-2008, 09:02 AM
Sometimes,
Someone enters a room,
Someone you haven't seen in a while,
And then, oh my,
What a life of its own
Has the smile.

HeronW
03-23-2008, 06:21 AM
cat
sings me to sleep with furry purrs.

Teena
03-31-2008, 08:55 AM
He struts in tiny steps
as though his pants were too tight
Tail swishing high like
palm fronds at a royal procession
He is omnipotent
cat-lord of the house

Appalachian Writer
04-26-2008, 02:55 PM
A flutter of flight,
bird's wing sings to soar.

threedogpeople
09-02-2008, 02:41 PM
Rain
chasing
summer sun
away.

Respite
from a
sullen sky
sunbeams play.

Rain
teasing
sun seekers
while threatening
fall.

Warm
air teasing,
cool moisture
underneath.

Leaves
valiantly holding
the last of
summer's
green glow.

Summer
is dying
fall is arriving
winter winds
begin to blow.

Oh, no.

Teena
09-04-2008, 08:40 AM
cat-child passed to the next realm
job ends and the room breathes
freedom in and tension out
though the next owner of this house
doesn't know who he is yet --
someone is clearing my path
to somewhere

ddgryphon
09-04-2008, 04:31 PM
even without the ring
i kept my promise

you, with your ring,
forgot and continue


forgetting

LaceWing
09-17-2008, 10:41 AM
"Apple trees bloom in the cold, not from conviction."

(a line excerpted from a poem at the slowmuse blog soon after reading something by David Foster Wallace.)

Teena
10-15-2008, 10:44 PM
sunny days
crisping nights
Autumn seeks balance

Cassie88
10-16-2008, 06:50 AM
Summer's gone,
the long hot flash
holds on;
the standing fan whirrrrs.

threedogpeople
10-17-2008, 08:37 AM
Words thrown in anger
like daggers
killing pieces of my heart.

Teena
10-17-2008, 09:28 AM
happiness can be lost
or discarded
but is rarely found
like a penny in the parking lot
lying patiently until you
happen by
it is usually something
you must make for yourself

ddgryphon
12-05-2008, 06:55 AM
tamed a servant
unwatched a destroyer

fire

Cassie88
09-04-2010, 05:11 AM
Actors and audience
beaming,
the standing ovation

Steppe
09-04-2010, 07:38 AM
in the glow
of cobwebbed rooms

the smoky scent
of lamps

Cassie88
09-04-2010, 08:31 AM
Counting the days
till I open the windows
and let the wind come in
to warm itself

Cassie88
09-09-2010, 12:51 AM
Onion

We are like the onion
peel back the layers
and tears appear

A. Hamilton
09-16-2010, 11:28 AM
emptied house
worn welcome under my shoes
dust stifles the echo of laughter

yet the geraniums remember me

double pink blossoms
shout their green welcome

Cassie88
09-23-2010, 02:06 AM
The cherry tomato,
like a rosy-cheeked child
giddy with a secret,
until finally,
it bursts
with such delicious joy!

Cassie88
09-29-2010, 04:54 AM
End of Summer

You're eating
too much electricity.

It's not working
for me anymore.

GET OUT!

d_racae_lyn
10-03-2010, 12:25 PM
I MOVE ON FOUR WITH THE RISING OF THE SUN,
THEN ON TWO WHEN THE DAY IS IN THE MIDDLE,
THEN ON THREE WHEN THE DAY IS FINALLY DONE,
SO COME YOU NOW AND TRY TO SOLVE THIS RIDDLE.

AT BIRTH I AM OH SO NEEDY, YOUNG AND WEAK,
IN YOUTH I GREET LIFE WITH GREAT RESOLVE,
IN TWILIGHT YEARS 'TIS FOR PEACE THAT I SEEK,
CONSIDER THE CLUES, THE RIDDLE YOU'LL SOLVE!

See if any of you can guess the answer to this verse!

Clue:

Based on a story from long ago and far away,
The riddle give the clues but does not say,
That it's a little tough they is no deny'in'
Just think head of man and body of lion,
An ancient question, simply rewritten,
Speaker alone and lonely in the hot sand sittin'.

D'racae'lyn

This is of my devising based on something I read as a child.

alanna
10-03-2010, 06:19 PM
waking up cold,
I suspect the seasons
are playing a trick
on me

Cassie88
10-03-2010, 10:36 PM
I MOVE ON FOUR WITH THE RISING OF THE SUN,
THEN ON TWO WHEN THE DAY IS IN THE MIDDLE,
THEN ON THREE WHEN THE DAY IS FINALLY DONE,
SO COME YOU NOW AND TRY TO SOLVE THIS RIDDLE.

AT BIRTH I AM OH SO NEEDY, YOUNG AND WEAK,
IN YOUTH I GREET LIFE WITH GREAT RESOLVE,
IN TWILIGHT YEARS 'TIS FOR PEACE THAT I SEEK,
CONSIDER THE CLUES, THE RIDDLE YOU'LL SOLVE!

See if any of you can guess the answer to this verse!

Clue:

Based on a story from long ago and far away,
The riddle give the clues but does not say,
That it's a little tough they is no deny'in'
Just think head of man and body of lion,
An ancient question, simply rewritten,
Speaker alone and lonely in the hot sand sittin'.

D'racae'lyn

This is of my devising based on something I read as a child.

D, you won't get any responses to your post in this thread... Maybe post in the general poetry forum where the other writers can respond.

d_racae_lyn
10-03-2010, 11:33 PM
Thank you cassie, but which one should I put it in? And you seem to know your way around here pretty well, how would you advise someone who has next to no formal knowledge of accepted English sentence structure to critique others without offending anyone. My own writings come from my heart, not from a conscious knowledge of English grammar rules. They are couched exactly in the words as I truly speak when I soul speak and it is very difficult for me to do aught else, for I do not frequent the "real world" enough to be conversant with acceptable speech patterns other than from what I read.

Help, any advice would be welcome, as I desperately want to not only be accepted but also, even more importantly, learn to "speak the words of my heart" in a way that the world at large will find acceptable.

D'racae'lyn

I do not remember where it is, but I revamped something that I had written last father's Day and I posted it here on this site. One of the other members suggested I make it more of a "reader interactive" story rather than simply stating facts. Long and short of it, I did in fact and truth rewrite it. And strangely, although that is the first time that I have ever tried to consciously harness my writing ability, it actually turned out half way decent. It is under the heading called something like "victor or victim of fate's mercurial whims". If you have time could you take a look at both versions and give me your opinion whether I achieved, or at the very least partially grasped, the concept behind the advise the other site member gave me, and which is also on that page? I do not want to try to criticize others until I can be sure I know what I am talking about. I hate it when people get upset with me, it makes me depressed and I deal with that enough with my illness. I think it might be in the poetry section.

d_racae_lyn
10-03-2010, 11:34 PM
World speak lies but a moment on the ears and then is quickly forgotten, but soul speak dwells forever within the heart and is eternally remembered.

D'racae'lyn

d_racae_lyn
10-03-2010, 11:36 PM
Cassie, the thing that I revamped is called THE WHITE ROSE.

The small version with the image is the original, the other is the revamp.

D'racae'lyn

MidlifeMark
10-03-2010, 11:47 PM
I MOVE ON FOUR WITH THE RISING OF THE SUN,
THEN ON TWO WHEN THE DAY IS IN THE MIDDLE,
THEN ON THREE WHEN THE DAY IS FINALLY DONE,
SO COME YOU NOW AND TRY TO SOLVE THIS RIDDLE.

AT BIRTH I AM OH SO NEEDY, YOUNG AND WEAK,
IN YOUTH I GREET LIFE WITH GREAT RESOLVE,
IN TWILIGHT YEARS 'TIS FOR PEACE THAT I SEEK,
CONSIDER THE CLUES, THE RIDDLE YOU'LL SOLVE!

See if any of you can guess the answer to this verse!

Clue:

Based on a story from long ago and far away,
The riddle give the clues but does not say,
That it's a little tough they is no deny'in'
Just think head of man and body of lion,
An ancient question, simply rewritten,
Speaker alone and lonely in the hot sand sittin'.

D'racae'lyn

This is of my devising based on something I read as a child.

The source of this riddle, methinks,
is surely the ancient Sphinx.
And answer I can,
I say it is Man;
now I think I shall catch forty winks.

d_racae_lyn
10-04-2010, 04:33 AM
Dear Midlifemark, you got it in one and it tickles me pink that you answered in rhyme!

it made me smile for the first time in over two weeks. you aren't really inspired to smile when you are fighting both mania and depression at the same time. sort of like being torn between two worlds.

D'racae'lyn

Qbynewbie
10-04-2010, 05:28 AM
Mark hasn't started a Newbie thread yet, so I'm going to spill the beans a bit: he's a fellow pilot who participates in a pilots forum that I also post in from time to time. Over there, he's known as an all-round nice guy and the man with the most talent with verse -- by far. :)

And, Mark, welcome to AW! You now have a rep point. Click on "User CP" in the top tool bar to check it out. :D

MidlifeMark
10-04-2010, 06:13 AM
Don't blow my cover, Brian, everybody thinks I write clean limericks! :D

Qbynewbie
10-04-2010, 06:14 AM
You do! Sometimes. :D

d_racae_lyn
10-04-2010, 07:51 AM
To MidlifeMark and Qbynewbie

Way high up in the azure sky
On wings of dreams you often fly
Up there of earthly cares you're free
No boundaries far as eye can see
Join the eagle in its flight
Up among the clouds so light
All the cares of weary mankind
When you fly are left behind
Up there you hear the muse's voice
You'd never land if you had choice.

Wishing you both a dragon's blessing.....

MAY YOU HAVE CALM WINDS AND CLEAR SKIES FOREVER

D'racae'lyn

PS...just a spur of the moment composition in honor of you both. and sometime when you are flying, think of me kindly, that mayhaps my soul might also for a short time fly free of earthly cares.

Qbynewbie
10-04-2010, 08:01 AM
How wonderful! :) Thank you very much for a very special poem. I'm going to post it on the pilots forum. :)

And the next time I go flying, I will take your name on a piece of paper and when I am high above the earth I will let it go free. :)

Thank you for such an unexpected, completely thoughtful gesture.

MidlifeMark
10-04-2010, 08:38 PM
I can't fly without fuel in my tanks.
I can't make a smooth turn without banks.
But it all is made whole
When you add in the soul,
As you did in your lovely verse. Thanks!

Cyia
10-06-2010, 05:56 AM
Not really sure how this works, but I'll give it a shot. :) (Hopefully you won't shoot back if it's wrong :D )

From the corner of my eye,
a shadow on the wall,
is all that's left;
a memory of past sorrow
that follows always in my path.

Teena
10-27-2010, 07:55 AM
The source of this riddle, methinks,
is surely the ancient Sphinx.
And answer I can,
I say it is Man;
now I think I shall catch forty winks.


Mark beat me to the answer, so I'll add to clarify....

on all fours he'll crawl
when man is quite small
rise to two legs in time
to walk through his prime
but as older became
required a thin cane....

bad rhyme, but there you have it. ;)

Now back to our regularly scheduled thread.

jessicaorr
10-30-2010, 04:50 PM
Bookshelf:

Competition between the strength of oak
And the weight of my hardback collection of
The complete works of Alexander Dumas

Cassie88
11-02-2010, 10:55 PM
(If you're unsure of what belongs in this thread, just check out the first post)

poetinahat
02-22-2011, 11:36 AM
this walnut meat
resembles
a small, weathered
pelvis

as it is
crushed between my teeth
and as its shards
dissolve in my mouth
i imagine the taste
of x-ray

and i wonder
whether this xmas
i shall enjoy the taste
of the nutmeg