Hey,
I'm new to this forum. This is my first post. But I would really love it if I could find someone willing to take a look at some of my WIP. (And I'd be happy to exchange with someone too.) I've been working on it for two years on and off, and it still needs a lot of work, but I'm at the point where I'm really unsure of what direction to take with my edits, so I would love some fresh eyes.
Some things about my novel-in-progress:
-About 90,000 words
-Genre's kind of weird, but urban fantasy is the best I can fit it into
-The Premise: Thirty years ago, there existed a world of magic. The fairies lived hidden from the mortals, and there were constant wars between the dark fairies and the light fairies. This was until Mercy, a dark fairy, seized control and ended up destroying all the magic. Most of the fairies died or lost their powers. Now Mercy is forced to be the hero and, along with her mortal nephew and nieces, bring back the magic and save the fairies that she once destroyed.
-The POV is a little bit experimental. It's 3rd person limited, but it's a bit stream-of-consciousnessy, like As I Lay Dying, and there are several different POV characters, like in the A Song of Ice and Fire series.
-It is the first book in a trilogy, and I will hopefully write more than those three in this universe, as I have lots of backstory that I would love to someday tell.
-There's some sexual assault and abusive relationship stuff, although that's not the main focus, so if you are uncomfortable with that, please don't read it.
Things I'd like someone looking at this to focus on:
-What's confusing, especially with respect to world building and backstory. (Obviously some things are meant to be confusing as they are revealed later, but I've been in this universe so long that sometimes it's hard to know what a newcomer would find confusing.)
-Which characters you like and which you dislike
-Where plot is too slow
Really just anything else would be great too. I really don't know the best way to move forward at this point, but I just want to tell this story. I've shared this with a couple friends, but I've never really had anyone properly look over it. I really don't know what the etiquette is or anything. I'm entirely new to this process, but anything would be helpful.
Thanks,
Harrison
I'm new to this forum. This is my first post. But I would really love it if I could find someone willing to take a look at some of my WIP. (And I'd be happy to exchange with someone too.) I've been working on it for two years on and off, and it still needs a lot of work, but I'm at the point where I'm really unsure of what direction to take with my edits, so I would love some fresh eyes.
Some things about my novel-in-progress:
-About 90,000 words
-Genre's kind of weird, but urban fantasy is the best I can fit it into
-The Premise: Thirty years ago, there existed a world of magic. The fairies lived hidden from the mortals, and there were constant wars between the dark fairies and the light fairies. This was until Mercy, a dark fairy, seized control and ended up destroying all the magic. Most of the fairies died or lost their powers. Now Mercy is forced to be the hero and, along with her mortal nephew and nieces, bring back the magic and save the fairies that she once destroyed.
-The POV is a little bit experimental. It's 3rd person limited, but it's a bit stream-of-consciousnessy, like As I Lay Dying, and there are several different POV characters, like in the A Song of Ice and Fire series.
-It is the first book in a trilogy, and I will hopefully write more than those three in this universe, as I have lots of backstory that I would love to someday tell.
-There's some sexual assault and abusive relationship stuff, although that's not the main focus, so if you are uncomfortable with that, please don't read it.
Things I'd like someone looking at this to focus on:
-What's confusing, especially with respect to world building and backstory. (Obviously some things are meant to be confusing as they are revealed later, but I've been in this universe so long that sometimes it's hard to know what a newcomer would find confusing.)
-Which characters you like and which you dislike
-Where plot is too slow
Really just anything else would be great too. I really don't know the best way to move forward at this point, but I just want to tell this story. I've shared this with a couple friends, but I've never really had anyone properly look over it. I really don't know what the etiquette is or anything. I'm entirely new to this process, but anything would be helpful.
Thanks,
Harrison
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