It's rough and super ugly. It need serious surgery to fix the holes that removing three characters caused. It need new scenes to fit the one new character in. The characters left need new scenes together so they can have more cohesive bonds. The fight scenes are trash and need serious attention. The dialogue.. The descriptions.. OK EVERYTHING needs to be worked on. This sucker is SO ugly.
it reminds me of when my own daughter was first born. She was so squished up and covered with slime. Honestly, she was ugly. All newborns are that way. Nobody looks good when they first pop out into the world. It takes a few days for them to look like people. But she was right there and alive! And I could finally see her! As ugly as she was, I thought she was the most beautiful baby that ever lived.
And now I look at my shabby ugly little draft and feel the same way. We've got a long way to go, but you're finally here, story. Happy first draft birthday!
it reminds me of when my own daughter was first born. She was so squished up and covered with slime. Honestly, she was ugly. All newborns are that way. Nobody looks good when they first pop out into the world. It takes a few days for them to look like people. But she was right there and alive! And I could finally see her! As ugly as she was, I thought she was the most beautiful baby that ever lived.
And now I look at my shabby ugly little draft and feel the same way. We've got a long way to go, but you're finally here, story. Happy first draft birthday!
Yay! What a great feeling! Congratulations!
