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I'm currently working on my dual POV 1st person YA thriller (hopefully this is the last edit!). For the last couple of months, I have been concurrently revising my query letter. (Man, is it hard to boil it down to 250 enticing words!)
Although there are two MCs, the story is really MC1's. The chapters aren't even split equally between them (they're ~60% MC1 and only ~40% MC2).
I've written various versions of the query, but it always gets messy when I try to work in MC2. When I leave him out, the query reads much better (At least, I think it does ... I guess I'll find out in QLH at some point if I'm brave enough!).
I'm pretty happy with where the query is right now. BUT, if I'm lucky enough to have some bites for partials/fulls (fingers-crossed), would an agent think "WTF?" when they see there's another MC who didn't even crack a passing mention in the query?
Although there are two MCs, the story is really MC1's. The chapters aren't even split equally between them (they're ~60% MC1 and only ~40% MC2).
I've written various versions of the query, but it always gets messy when I try to work in MC2. When I leave him out, the query reads much better (At least, I think it does ... I guess I'll find out in QLH at some point if I'm brave enough!).
I'm pretty happy with where the query is right now. BUT, if I'm lucky enough to have some bites for partials/fulls (fingers-crossed), would an agent think "WTF?" when they see there's another MC who didn't even crack a passing mention in the query?