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Magdalen
12-17-2015, 08:15 AM
Got some low, rank, bottom
of a bottle of the bottom of
a barrelís end
so hello
thatís where I spend
almost all my time,

donít see why
anyone calls it high,

(when itís)
moí so low, rank, bottomed-out
butt-end down
smileís wearing a frown

(so fuck u!
not out
yet )smoky-tuned
floating above/beyond bottomless
disowned-ground
encroaching-on-the ort cloud
found in B-flat (bless
my ass damnit) blues Ė eh?




~

If you've got anything to add at least try to not bum me out.

Steppe
12-17-2015, 09:24 AM
Nice to see you posting again Mag!

In the beginning, for me, it was a "high". But it began to set lower and lower. I chased that high for a long time and never found it again!

I lived in this poem. Thank you.

I'm assuming all the "bottoms" to begin, were to emphasize that it was no longer a "high".

Stew21
12-17-2015, 06:24 PM
ooh. I love this. wonderful cadence, word choice, play and gravity all in one.

tastes like an old oak barrel, even. :)

CassandraW
12-17-2015, 09:04 PM
(After a bit of a quiet spell, what a wonderful burst of poems in this room in the last 24 hours!)

I love this, Mag. So atmospheric and bluesy. It made me want to put my Lead Belly album, chased down with some vintage Tom Waits.

William Haskins
12-18-2015, 04:18 AM
this was a rollicking ride.

Magdalen
12-18-2015, 08:09 AM
Thanks for the comments.

Update - shades of blue often appear nearly white, depending on the illumination-source spectrum, according to a reading on my mood meter. >**<

Steppe
12-18-2015, 09:29 AM
Well I did interpret this according to my own histories and might have missed the authors intent. I do like it.

deano
12-19-2015, 08:50 AM
You managed to mix in alliteration, assonance and consonance in one euphonious poem. Not too shaby, not too shaby at all. :)

cjtait
03-04-2016, 08:40 PM
I am finding myself here, and this poem is deafening. I adore it.

Sarita
03-05-2016, 02:12 AM
Well done! Particularly great rhythm.

I_love_coffee
03-05-2016, 09:03 PM
loved the style of this

Dennis E. Taylor
03-05-2016, 11:03 PM
I've seen this thread go by from time to time in the "Latest Posts". I'm not into poetry at all, but I have to say that I love the title.

Magdalen
03-08-2016, 12:44 AM
Thanks for the recent comments, they've cheered me up!!!

poetinahat
03-08-2016, 04:06 AM
Often this sort of dirty messy poetry misses me, and I don't really get it. (Ulysses - a two hundred-page paragraph? Really, now.) But you got me with this one - it feels 3-D and bitter and grimy and kind of drunk but still aware.

It would be too lazy to say it reminds me of Tom Waits, but it does.

This might be my favorite Mags poem to date!