Well, I'm flying along with a serial killer novel and make no mention of the serial killer out there stabbing high school girls through the heart (at night) and pulling a tooth for a keepsake--"The Tooth Fair." This begins in Chapter one. The detective assigned to the case is very new. He and his fiance are shot up pretty bad in a failed carjacking, leaving him with lung-shot wounds and her a blowout fracture in the side of the face, requiring facial surgery and a cornea transplant. I only divulge the information of the killings through newspaper headlines in the first chapter and on for the rest of the book. The detective takes a steady slide into insanity as a result of being taken off the case for recoup and the guilt he has for not protecting his gal.
She has received a cornea from some strange donor that allows her to see angels and reapers following people around. As a result, she can use prophesy to determine time and death of people, which she will later use to solve this baffling serial killer case. This is the fun part of the main plot
My questions: I think I'm leaving out the serial killer and his characterization completely. He does need his own POV and chapters doesn't he? And he should be introduced fairly early on, correct?
Is killing teenage girls too much? I can make them college students just as easily.
Half this book is done and I just realized this tremendous blunder.
Any advice would be very helpful,
Tri
She has received a cornea from some strange donor that allows her to see angels and reapers following people around. As a result, she can use prophesy to determine time and death of people, which she will later use to solve this baffling serial killer case. This is the fun part of the main plot
My questions: I think I'm leaving out the serial killer and his characterization completely. He does need his own POV and chapters doesn't he? And he should be introduced fairly early on, correct?
Is killing teenage girls too much? I can make them college students just as easily.
Half this book is done and I just realized this tremendous blunder.
Any advice would be very helpful,
Tri
Last edited: